Thank you, I appreciate your thought out impressions and critiques! I think all your points are quite valid, and the feedback helps me look at things a bit more impartially. And overall, I'm happy to see that the experience seems to have been mostly a positive one given your score. Though by all means if you feel that this deserves a lower marking, I won't be offended. Honesty is the best policy and all that
I thought it was good. It was just a bit long-winded, was all. Although, I was expecting a sadder ending, one of longing, considering the title of the story was called Limerence. I was expecting a more bittersweet story, not a hopeful one. That somehow makes it feel as if they didn't have limerence, since they technically mutually reciprocated each other's company and feelings, even if they both didn't entirely realize that. However, having looked up the definition of limerence, I can see the meaning behind it in the context of this story. Again, it was well-written. The pacing was just slow and meandering at times from its purple prose to its descriptive narration.