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Thank you so much for reading!! Your praise is really encouraging, and it's also great to get critique on what parts didn't work as well.

I definitely agree with you that there's a lack of world building and character interaction (and in retrospect your expectation of Kit, Pseu, and the hunters all having a more ideological confrontation after the fight really did seem like the next logical step in the plot. I'm really disappointed in myself that I didn't do that lol). Writing environmental descriptions is also one of my weaknesses, so I'll have to practice that more. I'll be sure to keep all of this in mind in any future writing I do! 

Once again, thank you so much for your feedback! :)

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No worries.  I remember a number of times when someone's read my stuff and thought it was going in a direction I hadn't thought of, and I was kicking myself over not having thought of it beforehand.  But the upside is you've always got time to refine the story for the future.  And even with some of the missed opportunities, this is a very charming and coherent tale.