Oh, no. I totally agree! It's like taking a b&w photo with terrible lighting; you can see the picture, but you can't make out the details well.
I mention it on the main story page that this was actually my second attempt at a story for the jam- after also spending the month wracking my creative brain for a ficlet challenge (I got 19/28 prompts filled, with two in various states of completion and 2.5 prompts with notes on what to write lol) so it short circuited a bit writing Gavin's. There was even a point where I went 'I should do more showing than telling' but I couldn't quite find a way to fit it in. In the end, I think it was meant to be a bit impersonal. Just hope it's in the good way, haha. 😅