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Art and sound track are nice. I'm a little confused though. The way the phrase "I need to say something" appeared over both characters made me think they both were thinking it, but it sounds like it's just supposed to be the girl? Or the guy? It says "You said something" next to the girl. but I don't get why it's five seconds too late. Unless the guy said it when she was too far away to hear?

P.S. Reading through comments. It sounds like some say the scene is not as impactful because it's a simple every day moment where the guy could just say "I like you" again. I think it still works. Sometimes it takes a lot of courage to speak, and something as little as not being heard can throw someone off enough to not try again. At least not that moment. Perhaps another time, the protag will find his voice and be heard, but for today, he was 5 seconds too late. My initial critique of making the scene clearer still stands, but I think the premise is fine.

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thanks for the amazing feedback !!! The phrase i need to say depicts that they both want to say it but couldn't say it but the boy tried it at last, i think the direction goes a bit wrong , at  first i was trying something else, like creating a 2 choice box and timer for the guy but my lazy ass does not want to work on it and time was low so i change some scene mid cutscene. next time i try to convey the meaning more precisely and last part where there's no outcome i did not add it cause i thought it would be more fun to see what the viewer will think but i guess many of them expected the girl to be isekai'd by a truck or car  or something .

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You're welcome. It could work to imply both wish to say they like the other, but it's probably simpler to stick with just the guy's perspective. Or if you do show the girl's perspective, save it until after the guy speaks and she does not hear, but maybe she notices his mouth moving and wistfully thinks it would be nice if he was saying he liked her. "I really should tell him myself, but I'm too shy."

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thanks!!! that idea  works too i guess