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I'm playing the first one now, and will give full impressions when I'm finished, however I wanted to mention that there's a few words used in some contexts I'm unsure of. Like, they work but make me question if a better synonym could be used (Example: Eva using the word "constant" when the context makes me think "consistent" would work better). Could be a UK vs USA English difference, I suppose.

Also, there's this...

Just FYI, cause that's not Zeke lol.

.... And this:

May I offer to proofread future games? You don't have to pay me for it or anything, I just wanna make sure these games are the best they can be.

ebi-hime8 days ago

In the scene Eva uses the word 'constant' it makes sense. She's telling Tavi not to be faithful to Yuel, and 'constant' is a synonym for 'faithful', 'devoted', 'loyal', etc etc

The other two are errors and I will fix them later, thank you for pointing them out.
I already have a proofreader and they catch a lot of typos and errors, but some small things will always slip though the cracks, it's inevitable.

Samtoinette8 days ago

Yep, I know you have a proofreader already. I was just offering. Didn't know constant was a synonym for faithful though, I've never heard it used that way before.

Anyway, the writing is always good on these stories. You already know I love their dynamic so any time I see a Tavi/Yuel game, I grab it (assuming I know it is one). You weren't kidding about this one being erotica lol. Certainly nothing wrong with that, and I liked seeing a game from Tavi's perspective. I'd love to see more like that, and it makes me wonder what's going through his head in previous games with them you've made.

Honestly the only thing that I wind up considering when I play these is whether I like the art or not.

So far, my favorite artist you use is the one who worked on Unluckily in Love (I especially like how dark Tavi's complexion is in that case and I LOVE his pouting face).

The art for this one is okay, but a few of the sprites just look kinda strange to me. Mostly when Tavi is smirking, his lips look a little odd, like half his mouth is sewn shut. The CGs aren't terrible though. I wish it wasn't so censored, but I know itch has been cracking down on such things (for some reason) so I don't hold it against anyone.

ebi-hime8 days ago

If you want to point out any typos you can join my discord server here, I have a dedicated channel for typos where people can point out anything odd. It's also easier for me to have all the reported typos for my VNs in one place.

Yuel and Tavi have a very fun dynamic, they're a lot of fun to write... My most beloved boys 🙏

The censorship in this VN has nothing to do with Itchio's policies. The artist for this VN is Japanese, and it's illegal for Japanese artists to draw genitals. It goes against the Obscenity Act, and Japanese artists can literally be sent to prison for drawing uncensored sex scenes. This is also why all Japanese r18 games, manga, etc are censored in a similar way.

Samtoinette8 days ago

Ahhh okay, I gotcha. I just figured it was cause of itch, but it's all good!

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