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Oh, believe me--I've been here and enjoying since the Week 3 update! Anyway, now on 0.5.14. Here we go:

Day 19: The FLAT IS JUSTICE counterspell for the jar works on the boobs you gain after being gobbofied, since I think it just works as by shrinking them. Seems to be fixed on day 26 (Leaky Pipes), though.

Day 19b: Not sure WHAT I'm looking at here, but after extending the gawker eye with the claw, there seems to be some kind of stretched black blotch at the top of the shop? Looks like a weird shiny inkblot that blocks the day number. Also, I swear I remember the claw itself having some kind of right-click tip text, but I could just be misremembering.

Later addition: It seems to be the effect from the rubber potion confiscated by and thereafter from Karen. Probably shouldn't be present this early, and DEFINITELY shouldn't be overlapping normal UI...and to be clear, the problem persists when you self-gobbo on day 23.

Day 19c: Not a bug so much as a note...it's kind of odd how while the blueberry potion fades the blue skin tone in, the goblin potion just pops it straight to green at the end? Shrug. I guess it's only relevant for one day.

Day 19d: Only just noticed, not sure when this text shows up, but the portal bra cup says "Its twin is in the back. (very leaky. Making too much of a mess)". Either the V should be capitalized and there should be a period after "mess", or this should be part of the previous sentence as "...is in the back (very leaky, making too much of a mess)."

Day 19e: ...lots with this day. Anyway, I don't think lips potions always work on shortstacks, at least in some positions. Most noticeable with Gritta the Slime Slayer.

Day 19f: Minor, but it's amusing to me that Pinkie's butt actually gets smaller when she gets gobbo'd.

Day 19g: Last one for the day--miss level 3 boss whose name I forget says she thought I'd have more trouble being "gobified". Is that the usual term? At the very least I think there'd be another B or a hyphen, otherwise it doesn't read like it's presumably pronounced. Same with "gobification" in the next line.

Day 20: Not an issue, I just wanted to note that "Pixies, fairies, sprites, Nathan, leprechauns" is probably my favorite throwaway joke in the game.

Day 20b: Skee's explanation: "Inflate and Blueberry take priority over Shortstakification" not only misspells the last word ("Shortstack") and lacks a period but also reads like it was thrown in at the last second. An "Also, " would go a long way in making it feel like it fits with the rest of the dialogue.

Day 20c: When Rebecca the Bouncing Archer shows up to ask for help with her bimbo problem, she leaves off a period on her final "Heehee". Also, once again feels like kind of a shame that the color transition is instant, but maybe that's on the docket for future updates.

Day 20d: ...this might just be a skill issue, but "Head Crusher" doesn't really read as a monster-slaying title. Maybe "Skull Shatterer" or "Zombie Headcrusher", but while she certainly slays the other meaning doesn't really indicate MONSTERS.

Day 21: Mocha the Cute says "I wonder if I would ever end up even bigger" with no closing punctuation. Also, might just be me, but this sentence feels like "could" might fit better than "would"?

Day 22: The Magic Absorption Mask's tip text is almost exactly the length of the default tip scroll, leading to it clipping a little into the lower border. Might need to change a <= to a < somewhere.

Day 22b: Rebecca the Bouncing Archer says she's "over the embarasement" (should be embarrassment).

Day 24: The eponymous blade of Scarlet, Crimson Blade, really reads as having holy healing magic despite that apparently being an incorrect choice.

Day 24b: When the Witch goes on her tangent about the renovations to her summer home, it has a similar issue to another I mentioned with a parenthetical--maybe it'd work better as an aside between emdashes in this case? Kind of like this, haha--which just looks really weird in parentheses.

Day 25: Skee refers to themself as an "Executive Level 1 Mob Fodder" (should be Fodder Mob)

Day 26: Another parenthetical when Kat says "I'm larger! (and not just in the chest or rear area, like everyone else); since it's not part of the last sentence, "And" should be capitalized and there should be a period after "else".

Day 27: When awoken, Nina the Slimified Hero bemoans having to vanquish evil as a "LVEL 1 MOB MONSTER" (should be "LEVEL", and "MOB MONSTER is a little odd to me but keep it if you want). Also, "Evil waits for no one, squishy or no" might flow better if it were "squishy or otherwise" instead.

Day 27b: Minor thing: when shortstack'd, Rebecca the Bou--uh, Zombie Slayer continues to jiggle but does not visually jiggle. Seems like an edge case that doesn't need covering, but just thought I'd mention.

Day 27c: Violet the Mouth: "(I have a solid fallback plan if I ever quit adventuring)" needs ending punctuation.

Day 28: Skee says "We might get more support for defeating here!" Should be "her", and the line about Betsy talking to the other skeletons about the boss's "poo-poo"-ness feels kind of redundant with an earlier line that phrased things very similarly...though I'm not sure what day that was. Might have been around the start of week 4.

Day 28b: Sylvia, Mad Slime Researcher, refers to a "jelli queen"--might mean jelly, but not sure since she says it the same all three times. If you're looking for the actual word, probably spell it with a Y. If it's meant to be a made-up word...maybe capitalize it? I dunno.

Day 28c: After retrieving the Witch's wand from within Sylvia's body, she says "It's it amazing?" (Should be "Isn't it amazing?" or "It's amazing!")

And with that, I've reached the new content. Gonna make a new comment for that in case this browser session crashes. See you then!

Continuing, and still on 0.5.14.

Day 29: When Bee arrives at the window, the sheer size of her butt slightly overlaps a grappling hook she's holding.

Day 29b: TREVOR's parenthetical after promising a boon at a later date lacks initial capitalization or closing punctuation. However, you're welcome to leave this one in for the bit. (Maybe take out the comma, even.)

Day 30: I'm pretty sure I'm supposed to see SOMETHING in the window when Stella, Silver Duelist, shows up. Instead, it's just empty the whole time until she leaves. Also, is she supposed to say "dear Player" at the end of the scene? Wouldn't "dear Potion Seller" make more sense?

Day 31: Navi the intern mentions "(I need to get juiced some time)". The punctuation with the parentheses is technically fine, but that last bit should be "sometime"...and this phrase might work better as a separate sentence, anyway. Maybe "At least the transformations are kind of pleasurable. (I need to get juiced sometime.)" And maybe specify the transformations HERE or THESE transformations in that sentence, since she goes on to talk about transformations that aren't like that.

Day 32: In the scene with Monica the Bra Salesmimic, she mentions "it's time I skipped town for a hot minute and wait for recent controversies to cool down." This mixes tenses between "skipped" and "wait"; should probably change it to "skip" rather than "wait" to "waited".

Day 32b: Scarlet, Crimson Blade, says "The Crimson Blade suscepts your stock was not tested for curses." (Should be "suspects".)

Day 32c: Not something I encountered here specifically but I just remembered that double-boobening Scarlet, Crimson Blade, when you first give her the Skimpy Bra of Invincibility removes the bra. Probably fixed by now since she's attuned to it, but just in case it's an issue here specifically I thought I'd mention it since it's supposed to be stuck and not broken.

GENERAL: Not sure how I didn't notice until now--maybe it was replaced in one place but not everywhere?--but the Jar Counterspell note actually says "FLAT IS JUISTICE", not "JUSTICE". Could be a pun on "JUICE", I guess, but seems like a stretch. (Heh.)

Day 33: Cath, Warrior of the Loam, has a parenthetical about her tits getting in the way that needs initial capitalization and closing punctuation.

Day 33b: Scarlet, Crimson Blade, ends her plea for help with "Give me release! (that is, please get this thing off!)" The parenthetical lacks initial capitalization.

Day 33c: New Astrid aims to "Be a bit more...spontanious." Should be "spontaneous".

Day 34: The Sorceress says she'll have "enough [minions] left over to carry this bosum..." should be "bosom"

Day 34b: Karen mentions "bazongaz" which I'm not sure is a typo but seems to bear mentioning. She also says "If necessary!" which seems to be in response to Skee--did you mean "As is necessary!" or "It's necessary!"? Finally, after her transformation begins she says "air-headeds" where "airheads" would be appropriate, though that could be the start of her mental changes. Maybe add an ellipsis before it to make that clear, if that's the case.

Day 35: Skee mentions that the Sorceress "hasn't left her antichamber". Pretty sure you mean antechamber, not that first-person puzzle game.

Day 35b: The Wand of Technicolor Tentacles has some issues in the description: "anything living creature in the area" and "willing vs unwilling from inanimate or animate objects". I'd change those to "any/every living creature in the area" and "willing from unwilling and creatures from inanimate objects", but YMMV depending on what you meant for these to say.

Day 36: Skee has a few parentheticals missing initial capitalization: "(my my, this has all gotten a bit silly, hasn't it?)" "(she was quite easy to find. Very loud.)"

Day 36b: When Razor appears, she says "Did you miss-me, Alchemist!?" (Shouldn't be a hyphen there.)

Day 36c: Got stuck for a while on the final boss, which may have mostly been due to my inability to die after she started working on the shop. Maybe add an ending for if the shop's HP runs out? I think I also softlocked at least once by firing the honey too early at the tentacle-chopping saw.

Credits: I think what Jamie ended up doing would be spelled "re-speccing" or "respeccing", not "re-specking". To "speck" is to mark something with little spots, as opposed to "re-spec" which is a gaming term most dictionaries won't recognize. Yor probably confronted the succubus upon her "throne", not "thrown", and I think she probably said "That's it?" not "What's it?" In Bee's epilogue it says that tyrants have become "warry" of her--should be "wary"--and there shouldn't be a comma after "troops". Ruby's bio refers to "potions not dissimilar to The Potion Sellers," (should be Seller's?) "...but notably with permanent effects with fewer doses." (Double "with" is clunky, change the first to "giving" and/or the second to "from"). Sabrina's bio needs a comma between "Three months after meeting" and "Sabrina and the dragon have become married." Hazel's epilogue doesn't have punctuation at the end after "bug-simps". Navi's epilogue mentions her bimbofying "the guide's leader" (should be "guild's"). Cloe's...is fine, but lacks a portrait? Oct's should probably move that parenthetical outside of the sentence, capitalize, and add closing punctuation. Tense mixing in Monica's last sentence; "grew" and "eat" are separated quite a bit, but should be either both present or both past.

What a ride. I know I had a lot of corrections to make, but that's just the way I am. Seriously, thanks for making this wacky, funny, and of course lewd game.