Continuing, and still on 0.5.14.
Day 29: When Bee arrives at the window, the sheer size of her butt slightly overlaps a grappling hook she's holding.
Day 29b: TREVOR's parenthetical after promising a boon at a later date lacks initial capitalization or closing punctuation. However, you're welcome to leave this one in for the bit. (Maybe take out the comma, even.)
Day 30: I'm pretty sure I'm supposed to see SOMETHING in the window when Stella, Silver Duelist, shows up. Instead, it's just empty the whole time until she leaves. Also, is she supposed to say "dear Player" at the end of the scene? Wouldn't "dear Potion Seller" make more sense?
Day 31: Navi the intern mentions "(I need to get juiced some time)". The punctuation with the parentheses is technically fine, but that last bit should be "sometime"...and this phrase might work better as a separate sentence, anyway. Maybe "At least the transformations are kind of pleasurable. (I need to get juiced sometime.)" And maybe specify the transformations HERE or THESE transformations in that sentence, since she goes on to talk about transformations that aren't like that.
Day 32: In the scene with Monica the Bra Salesmimic, she mentions "it's time I skipped town for a hot minute and wait for recent controversies to cool down." This mixes tenses between "skipped" and "wait"; should probably change it to "skip" rather than "wait" to "waited".
Day 32b: Scarlet, Crimson Blade, says "The Crimson Blade suscepts your stock was not tested for curses." (Should be "suspects".)
Day 32c: Not something I encountered here specifically but I just remembered that double-boobening Scarlet, Crimson Blade, when you first give her the Skimpy Bra of Invincibility removes the bra. Probably fixed by now since she's attuned to it, but just in case it's an issue here specifically I thought I'd mention it since it's supposed to be stuck and not broken.
GENERAL: Not sure how I didn't notice until now--maybe it was replaced in one place but not everywhere?--but the Jar Counterspell note actually says "FLAT IS JUISTICE", not "JUSTICE". Could be a pun on "JUICE", I guess, but seems like a stretch. (Heh.)
Day 33: Cath, Warrior of the Loam, has a parenthetical about her tits getting in the way that needs initial capitalization and closing punctuation.
Day 33b: Scarlet, Crimson Blade, ends her plea for help with "Give me release! (that is, please get this thing off!)" The parenthetical lacks initial capitalization.
Day 33c: New Astrid aims to "Be a bit more...spontanious." Should be "spontaneous".
Day 34: The Sorceress says she'll have "enough [minions] left over to carry this bosum..." should be "bosom"
Day 34b: Karen mentions "bazongaz" which I'm not sure is a typo but seems to bear mentioning. She also says "If necessary!" which seems to be in response to Skee--did you mean "As is necessary!" or "It's necessary!"? Finally, after her transformation begins she says "air-headeds" where "airheads" would be appropriate, though that could be the start of her mental changes. Maybe add an ellipsis before it to make that clear, if that's the case.
Day 35: Skee mentions that the Sorceress "hasn't left her antichamber". Pretty sure you mean antechamber, not that first-person puzzle game.
Day 35b: The Wand of Technicolor Tentacles has some issues in the description: "anything living creature in the area" and "willing vs unwilling from inanimate or animate objects". I'd change those to "any/every living creature in the area" and "willing from unwilling and creatures from inanimate objects", but YMMV depending on what you meant for these to say.
Day 36: Skee has a few parentheticals missing initial capitalization: "(my my, this has all gotten a bit silly, hasn't it?)" "(she was quite easy to find. Very loud.)"
Day 36b: When Razor appears, she says "Did you miss-me, Alchemist!?" (Shouldn't be a hyphen there.)
Day 36c: Got stuck for a while on the final boss, which may have mostly been due to my inability to die after she started working on the shop. Maybe add an ending for if the shop's HP runs out? I think I also softlocked at least once by firing the honey too early at the tentacle-chopping saw.
Credits: I think what Jamie ended up doing would be spelled "re-speccing" or "respeccing", not "re-specking". To "speck" is to mark something with little spots, as opposed to "re-spec" which is a gaming term most dictionaries won't recognize. Yor probably confronted the succubus upon her "throne", not "thrown", and I think she probably said "That's it?" not "What's it?" In Bee's epilogue it says that tyrants have become "warry" of her--should be "wary"--and there shouldn't be a comma after "troops". Ruby's bio refers to "potions not dissimilar to The Potion Sellers," (should be Seller's?) "...but notably with permanent effects with fewer doses." (Double "with" is clunky, change the first to "giving" and/or the second to "from"). Sabrina's bio needs a comma between "Three months after meeting" and "Sabrina and the dragon have become married." Hazel's epilogue doesn't have punctuation at the end after "bug-simps". Navi's epilogue mentions her bimbofying "the guide's leader" (should be "guild's"). Cloe's...is fine, but lacks a portrait? Oct's should probably move that parenthetical outside of the sentence, capitalize, and add closing punctuation. Tense mixing in Monica's last sentence; "grew" and "eat" are separated quite a bit, but should be either both present or both past.
What a ride. I know I had a lot of corrections to make, but that's just the way I am. Seriously, thanks for making this wacky, funny, and of course lewd game.