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I, uhh, I'm not one for mincing words, so Imma' just say it straight:

I wanted to like it, but as the story is right now... It's a draft. In bad English. :'I  It was a bit of a struggle to read, to be honest. It defo needs some fixing up, mostly language-wise. 

Are you Hungarian, by any chance?

Thanks for reading, I appreciate the thoughts! This game is still in development so there will be edits and chapter releases in future updates.

From a writing standpoint, I’m using a style similar to the time period but I can see where you’re coming from.

However, I’ve been receiving a lot of speculation about my nationality, and kindly ask that these types of comments not be sent.

Hey, thanks for answering and not being offended by my bluntness! :v

I didn't clock that it is a time period thing; I guess cause that would usually be old English or in this case, simply old German? It's an interesting approach, but one to reconsider I think!

Sorry about that, I think people speculate so much because the influence of another language on your writing is very strong, and it makes them curious! 

Cheers, and keep up the good work! :x 

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Oh not at all! 

The style is loosely based on early 18th century with some conlang I created thrown into the mix. You can say the world is inspired by the Germany in that era.

It’s an intentional choice, not something I would change stylistically for the first few chapters. But I get it lol! It’s not always everyone’s preference. I still aim for readability overall hahaa

Next update will have the prelude be polished as I’m reworking some plot points and prose.