First of all, thank you very much for taking the time to write such detailed feedback! We really appreciate it. English isn’t our first language, so some of the issues you pointed out (phrasing, grammar, pacing in dialogue) are especially useful for us to improve!
To address your points:
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Worldbuilding and Intro Conflict
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Most of the lore and worldbuilding (human/anthro conflict, segregation, magic, etc.) is planned to come out in later chapters. We didn’t want the first chapter to be just a long info dump of how things work, so instead we chose to ease the reader into it with more “day-to-day” interactions and more natural description later.
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Why the MC is considered an outcast will become clearer in the story, it’s tied to something that happened and seemed small in this chapter but will develop into something much bigger!
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The school’s structure, dorms, and why everything is contained inside the academy is a crucial point in why the student stated that they "never saw a human" The segregation caused by the conflict will play a central role later and it will explain more why the mc is the first human they see. For magic, how it works, why it works the way it does, and why it causes tension/why human didn't use it will also get much more depth in upcoming chapters.
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Characters & Interactions
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Every girl in the school (and in the game overall) will have her own background, story, and personal conflicts for the MC to get involved in, Miel’s family issues being just one example.
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The snake character is indeed the hybrid, (we didn't want to spoil it like this, but it seems it caught your attention).
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The MC being “randomly” chosen is intentional for now, we can't say much more for now sorry :c
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Pacing & Style
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We know the pacing is a bit fast at the start, and your suggestion about giving the MC more dialogue options (his feelings about being chosen, etc.) is something we’ll definitely consider! We didn't want the reader to be too pushed on an approach to something rather than another so we took the decision to make it more "neutral
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Your point about the NSFW scenes (adding buttons to control pacing) is noted and will definitely be improved in future builds!
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Again, thank you for taking the time to try out our game! your notes help us see what’s working well (like Miel’s interactions!) and what needs more refinement. We have a lot of worldbuilding and story to roll out in the next chapters, and we want to deliver it in a way that feels natural rather than overwhelming