It seems like a very decent start of something? I have a lot of notes and feedback, but obviously you have a vision for this project. The most positive thing is that Miel's interactions are very enjoyable. Almost to the point I think the other characters will struggle to compete with her. But we shall see. The most negative thing I can say is a lot of the worldbuilding of the human-anthro conflict is sparse, and paints a very confusing picture if one tries to imagine how it all works, especially with the fact revealed later that anthros are basically magical-based creatures? I go over this more in my notes. Pacing is also kind of all over the place, but this isn't exactly the most rare of issues with itch VN's. though it does improve once Miel is introduced. I get you want to leave the MC blank, but it doesn't hurt to at least spend another 100 or so words to explain what's going on with him.
Alright, I'll start my feedback/observations now, based off my notes I took while playing.
1. intro and the entire conflict
Ugh, another "humans are the bad guys/instigators" trope is what I thought during the intro news report. Though I held my tongue and assumed more would be revealed later on. However I ended up having much more questions than answers by the end.
So, the anthro protesters in the beginning want equal rights with humans? Okay, so that kind of implies that anthros and humans have some kind of interactions already, though negative ones. The thing is, almost every character in the game has never seen a human before, so this implies that their societies are not integrated at all, if no one sees one another. But, at the same time, the school has a hybrid attending it?
The whole magic thing adds another confusing element. Is magic exclusive to anthros? The MC seems surprised by it, so I assume so. Why are magical beings incapable of gaining equal rights?l Do humans possess advanced technology that negates magic? The "advanced tech lab" seems to imply that it's not the case, unless the tech lab is anthros attempting to understand human technology, because it confuses them.
The MC involvement really needed a lot more fleshing out IMO. He's simply picked because he's picked. More options to say "I'm glad i Was picked, I am indifferent to being picked, I hate being picked."
This is my main problem with the pacing that I listed earlier.
I expected the Principal scene to fill in a lot of the world details but it was literally just "okay you're here, don't fuck this up"
2. *actions* and certain dialogue
I notice that *these* were showing up quite often. I am perfectly fine with this, but IMO a normal description of a bell going off is infinitely more fun to read compared to "ringbell goes off* (which by the way, is on the verge of being grammatical incorrect.) or *call incoming*
The tiger girl said <3. Personal opinion, but emotes and didalogue do not mix in a VN IMO.
..Even should be ...Even This popped up a lot. using 2 dots for ellipses instead of 3.
"Better start heading inside I guess"
Why did the CG show the MC inside the school already when this was said?
"you don't have a fur" should probably be "you don't have fur," OR make it "You don't have fur, wings, a tail, nothing..."
"I knew someone from your species were coming, but I didn't expect it" Should it be 'was coming'?
There really needed to be a double take "what kind of person starts a conversation like that? I just sat down!" option when Red Panda girl (Skye? Sorry, terrible with names) says "wanna mate?" when you first meet her.
"Outcast" during Miel and Oliver's scene was a weird word choice, given the MC hasn't done anything for people to think of him as an outcast (unless the their was a rumour started that the MC was rejected from human schools or something?)
I thought this scene was a good example of how to give the player a ton of options to choose what happens. It also had a lot of good character moments. You should use this as a template going forward for anything dramatic IMO.
*Bruh* Okay that made me laugh but I feel like the MC going "wha-" would be more fitting.
'toghether' instead of 'together' in the "let's do it" choice.
This isn't related to dialogue or actions, but please add buttons to this or future NSFW scenes so we don't need to click 10 times to advance the scene. (Slow/increase pace, and continue)
3. Final thoughtsThis VN does do that thing where you optionally fuck someone on your first day,, which I always think is a little fast, but I thought it was fitting for Skye's character to do that (I kind of expected her to be one of those "all talk, no actual experience" girls, though.)