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Anyways. 


Big fan of this story. I like the character focus, and I think you do a good job navigating the frame story and the inner story in a way that makes the divisions between them clear on the page, yet gives them both the space they need. I do think that changing the way you tell the inner story (maybe by structuring it as a story being told, or in a voice that doesn't match the frame story as closely) would strengthen the piece as a whole; the space between them is clear on the page, but the tone and content is so similar that they begin to blur together in the reading.

Very fair feedback and I appreciate you taking the time to go so in depth.  I do find when writing that I don't have a difficult time finding my tone, and I'm thankful for that, but maybe it's time to start challenging myself  instead of going to the default.  Thanks again, glad you liked it!