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Yay, I'm so glad you're excited!

As the narrator, I really look forward to those options! This is a game of choices and relationships after all, so it isn't a spoiler to say that there is more than one upcoming decision to spend time with the Younger.

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The only problem is that the Younger Twin is not overly keen on spending a great amount of time with you... yet.

So probably not in the first chapter, although these edits do include one more dialogue moment with U, near the end, if you choose that option. It's not a full scene but I enjoyed adding a few more paragraphs, and hopefully you enjoy reading them if you play the updated demo!

Aura_Aurora172 days ago (1 edit)

loll me actively getting rejected by the Younger [who I very hilariously love annoying by calling him Umryy or Umyyrr loll]

[SPOILER ALERT!]

God It's so hilarious when he picks us up and struggles slightly beneath us [I actually really loved that opt lol, specially cuz I am taller than him in game so eheheheheh] Also I love how we keep ignoring how annoyed he is.
I am his Wrath.
[mwahahahahhahaha]

P.s: I loved the way my character stuff was in the journal, the personality was almost exactly my real life and my idealistic persona. Tell me if you'd like my character's personality and appearance cuz I'd love to share with you Dearest Author!

Efflorescence171 days ago (3 edits)

You'll have your chance with the Younger, I promise - if you play your cards right!

I deeply appreciate that Umyyr and Umryy are just close enough to his real name to be extra annoying, haha. So glad you took advantage of the nickname feature. ( >▽< ) ~~You'll get to use it again one more time in the updated demo~~. And you'll actually be able to set your height in-game, as well, probably in the next chapter. Tall MC + Umr would be especially sweet, I think.

An insane amount of thought went into the different personality variants and how they could be interpreted, so to hear that it's almost exactly your IRL / ideal personality is very encouraging!

The journal is one of my favourite features.

And I always enjoy seeing what details players end up with, including the names, so if you ever want to share more information about your Wrath in a reply here, on tumblr, or in the comments, then of course I'd like to hear what variant you got / chose!

Thank you for the lovely comment!

~ Effie

Aura_Aurora171 days ago (1 edit)

Ooh! Super excited for the height thing to come in! [I too think tall MC and Umryy = sweetness overload.]
The journal is one of my favourite feature too!
Here is my Wrath. [why does that sound so ominous lol]

With your intelligent green eyes and wavy black hair, round human ears, fair complexion, and a angular countenance, Umr's Wrath is a rare sight in the arid plains of the deathless.

There is a red moon tattoo on your back and you have pierced ears You are blunt and honest, but there is an optimism beneath the honesty, a weapon in disguise.

Your impulses are in the direction of kindness, and it's difficult for you to turn away from a problem. Even so, you are most often self-assured, and confident in yourself and whatever judgments you may make in moments of great peril.

Not much lingers from your past, but it would be disingenuous to deny that you are a little vain, and take some pleasure in maintaining a good appearance. You keep your emotions close to your chest—even someone well-acquainted with you may struggle to understand your innermost feelings.

You are bound to serve Umr, and find an uncanny comfort in his presence; it is difficult to think when he is near. The sense of intrigue you feel makes you almost wish it was not so... Whatever your feelings may be, they are, at the very least, honest.

ARCHETYPE: currently undecided

WEAKNESS: none; you are very self-assured

EMOTIONS: closely guarded

NOTABLE TRAIT: vanity

IMPULSES: selfless

[lol I chose that uh- childhood memory thing's option to ask if the air of the kin was cuter than us for fun, didn't know that it would actually show up heree]

[Also I'm more charming in reality and most probably not soo selfless but I love how realistically my character got shaped in game so kudos!]

Btw I just gotta say, I absolutely am smitten with your writing style so thank you for spending all this time reading through my chatter hehe. Keep on going! Can't wait for the update!!!

Love, Aura.

Efflorescence171 days ago (4 edits) (+1)

Ooohhh I love your Wrath's appearance! The green eyes and black hair is such a vibe with the red moon tattoo. It was very cool for me to read through all of that and I'm really glad you vibe with the writing style, too!

I frequently pick the "adorable" choice while playtesting because it's one of my favourites, and after hearing that you were taken aback by vanity appearing in your profile (lol) I'll probably mark those choices as important before the update goes live so that players really consider their options. That's only fair, since it's part of character creation. Adding it to my to-do list. The self-assured trait is a very unique one as well, by the way; I can guess a few of your choices from Wrath's description!

Spotted at least one typo and one broken variable, but thankfully resolved those in the "new" demo (no new chapter yet, just revisions, I keep feeling the need to repeat myself online so I don't accidentally disappoint anyone haha) which should be up later today or tomorrow. I'll admit I've already started working on Chapter 2 again...

Will probably have to do some troubleshooting for a while, depending on what bugs players message me about, but after that it's back to the new content full-time. And no worries at all about reading these comments. It's been a nice break from edits and it's honestly great to see how different your choices were from my beta readers. Makes me very happy I put so much early effort toward character customization!

Good luck to Wrath!

~ Effie

Aura_Aurora171 days ago

Thank you, I also really loved that you kept the opt for the tattoo's colour selection, it's something really rare...! [Wrath would probably blush at the compliment and then regain composure immediately lol]

Btw that actually reminds me, if you ever need another beta reader I am more than available!

Lots of love Effie <3

Efflorescence170 days ago (1 edit)

Really?! I'm actually surprised to hear that tattoo colours might be an uncommon customization option, especially since a lot of IFs have much more customization than Garden of Bones! Extra glad I included it in the demo now. Your Wrath being the type to blush and then hide it is quite funny lol: self-assured, closely guarded individuals are good fun to be around, both IRL and in fiction. We can't all wear our heart on our sleeves, right?

And WOW, that offer is such a kind one. (ㅅ´ ˘ `) I've actually been meaning to inquire after additional beta readers, so if you're still willing to have all illusions of a sensible reading experience shattered (lol) by the time Chapter 2 is finished, let me know! I can't imagine it will be playable for at least another few weeks tbh... a lot of it is drafted and the rest of it outlined, but almost none of it coded yet and one particular scene has so many variants that I actually needed a flowchart to work it out, which is rare for me, lol.

I would have said that the best way to reach me is probably on my tumblr through direct messages (if you have a tumblr) but at the moment my main blog is shadowbanned and I don't think you can send DMs through the side-blog feature, so perhaps I'll just leave a comment here and we'll work something else out at the time. Hmmm.

Maybe discord, if you have one of those?

Either way, all the best, Aura!

Aura_Aurora170 days ago

I do not have Tumblr... I do have discord tho! I'd really love to help so... how do I reach you? Like through discord do you have a server?

Anyways thank you Effie for the compliments lol! I just replayed through a new garden lol and your writing really never fails to amaze!
Love, Aura <3

Efflorescence170 days ago(+1)

That sounds great! There's no need to worry about reaching out: I'll reply to this comment when Chapter 2 is finished enough for beta-reading to see if you're still interested by then, if that's alright with you? I do have a discord account, and tbh I should probably start a server - I don't have many betas at the moment but it might be useful someday.

Aura_Aurora170 days ago (1 edit) (+1)

Perfect! See you then <3

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