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Norbez Jones (call me Bez)183 days ago(+1)

Hey!  This is the guy from Tumblr (the Indy TTRPGs group).  So, I read what you have so far, and overall I did like it!  The lore is super interesting and was very fun to read.  This alternate future sounds pretty rad! 

I do have a few notes:

  • Why does the currency (G) not stand for anything?  I think specifying the currency could be a great chance for worldbuilding.
  • I have trouble imagining what a battle might look like.  You talk about things that will take place in it and tools that help you in it, but there's no real example to model how a battle should go.  Also, who are the enemies?  How strong are they?
  • Can only people on Earth use magic?  Or can off-worlders like the narrator of the Lore use magic on Earth?
  • The Weapon Tinkering doc confused me.  Why list them by class if you can mix & match weapons to different classes?  Listing them by weapon type would be simpler.
  • Levelling is odd to me.  Why not increase SP in increments?  If I was a player, I can see myself being frustrated that I can't do more with my SP as I level up.

I think the concept is very promising & fun, it just needs more development & ironing out.

That's all I got now!  Lmk if you have any questions!

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Beck Phillips183 days ago

Hey! thanks for the feedback!

  • Honestly, G doesn't stand for anything mostly because I think it's funny. Gold isn't a particularly valuable metal, being soft and rather weak, and G is actually a totally unique material. I'll likely elaborate further on this later on.
  • This isn't really a question I've ever considered! I'll likely include more information on this with the rules in version 0.0.3, but I'm not totally sure how to properly explain it, other than just saying that it's, like, a battle? I'm not quite sure how to best answer this question, so if you could elaborate on it some, that would be lovely to see!
    • The enemies are usually Monsters - I could have sworn that I explained them in the lore document, but I may have skipped over it. Monsters are creatures made out of a form of "corrupt" or traumatized magic, called ku'ai
    • Strength honestly varies, though the usual theme is that they'd be a little weaker than Heroes, and most threatening in groups or if you're just a civilian. (This is still more like balancing, i think...)
  • While Magic only works on the planet Earth, there's a weird line in that most ahaeth - such has the writer of the lore document - are nearly incapable of using magic. An ahaeth who uses magic is the statistical outlier.
  • Weapon Tinkering is usually assuming a weapon - like, for example, a Hunter uses a crossbow, or a Warrior uses a sword. If you want a Ninja who just uses a tomato for their weapon, go for it! (I think I stated something akin to that at the top of the document, was it not clear enough?)
  • I hope I'm not misunderstanding, but I do plan on adding the HP & SP increases to each level later on, around the same time that I specify what skills you unlock at each level. There's also going to be a number of additional items for recovering SP in the future, but they're going to be added a little later in development.

I hope that I've answered any of your questions! Let me know if there's anything else you have to ask about it!

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Norbez Jones (call me Bez)179 days ago

Responding to each point:

  • Got it!  I'm curious how it got made into a currency if it's also a material.  Maybe something to explore in the lore!
  • I took a few days to think about why I feel like I can't visualize a battle well, and I finally realized why: it's because all of the information about what happens in a battle is scattered around the different documents, not put neatly in one place.  I think if you were able to do that with a "Battle Information" document or some-such, you'd be golden.
  • Gotcha!  So are the players all human?  I'm curious what would happen if someone tried to play an outsider.
  • Oh, I think I get what you're saying now.  I thought what you wrote in the document meant, "If you want, any class can have any of the weapons here, so feel free to mix & match!"  I didn't think it meant, "If you want to replace a class' item with one created by you, go for it!"  Do you see what I mean?
  • I did see that!  What I'm saying is that it takes too long to unlock new skills.  As a player, when I get new skills during a level up, it feels like my character is evolving to be better.  That feeling is important, at least in my opinion.

Lmk if that makes sense!  I don't want to clog up the comments though--how about we talk on Discord?  You can add me @norbezjones .

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