I agree, it probably could have used a bit more padding in their conversations, but I also wanted to keep a tight narrative without much fluff. Reading back now, it would have been nice to have a little more casual conversation, as things happen back to back rather quickly. I appreciate the feedback, and thanks for taking the time to read, Cybersalmon!
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As you have noticed things happen quickly. The idea that any additional conversations you would have added would have been "padding" would probably not be true. Unless you had them talking about entirely unrelated things you wouldn't have added any fluff. The whole point of the VN is see what their relationship is and how it develops. You built in a lot of good parallels and dynamics. You just gotta exploit them!
Thanks again for the read!