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i read WWW and now i'm a trans wolf? AWOOOOOOOOOOOO!
I am so GLAD you're back again this year. Your stories are just overwhelming with cuteness. Really, it's a simple story at its core, but its crafted perfectly. The characters, artwork, plot, all wrap up to be a fantastic package. Absolutely phenomenal work.
If I had to give some advice for future works, I would say the music/scene transitions could be a little more polished, but overall, WWW's presentation is so cute that I wanna DIE!!! Thank you for brightening my day.
Man, your stories are so good and wild. This was a very short piece, but it hits hard. I love the abrupt transition between fantasy and reality here, and it is just such an interesting premise, easily the most unique VN I've read so far.
I just want to say your biggest talent is being able to pull at the heartstrings of the reader, drawing them in with the shock value, and keeping them in with the relentless narrative. I am really jealous of your skill at writing in this way.
Dead is Dead was the perfect emotional rollercoaster, and while short, it ended up being the perfect length with what it set out to accomplish. Wonderful job, GatrGroh!
Ahh I'm blue balled so hard. I was really digging this story. The artwork, premise, and storytelling are great, and Herman is so incredible in terms of appearance and personality. We're obviously very constrained by time here, but I really enjoyed the love at the end of the universe plot and would love to see an expanded version in the future. It felt like the story was just beginning, and it's got a lot of potential.
Wow this was a good one. I thought the Wolf in the Wardrobe exceled at the exploration of identity and coming of age, and Ilmari's viewpoint is very grounded yet profound as he navigates his traditional upbringing and relationship with Sampo. It was a little hard to get into because of the MASSIVE walls of text at the start, but it picked up once the narrative got going. I was a little disappointed with the ending, but I think that made the overall story hit much harder, much to my chagrin.
In terms of the presentation, the sprites and backgrounds are wonderful. I love the hand painted effects on the backgrounds, and I was surprised to see multiple characters with expressive sprites and the CG art. The music was also well utilized, and the overall experience was powerful (albeit depressing). Honestly, I'd love to see more content in this world. It kind of reminded me of Adrasta with the more Roman influence, and we love the C.S. Lewis metaphors.
Excellent work, team!
Chellay, my trucker buddy in crime! I am so jealous of how beautiful your story is. It beautifully captured the soul of a young wolf leaving home due to not being accepted, only to be swept up by the compassionate bara gay wolf trucker, very similarly to mine. Guess it's a good theme, if we both came up with it! Hehehe.
The first half was very rich in the internal dialogue, and I loved the way he reflects upon his past leading into the present. Cassidy is very freaking hot and a compelling character in his own right. Kudos on having the courage to make such a long and spicy 'H scene', and the shower setting was definitely appreciated... uwu
The questioning of religion at the end really hit home for me, and the whole story made me tear up at the end. Overall it was a wonderful piece, but I do want to say it was perhaps a little too ambitious. The flashback at the start, the meetup escalating, the original songs and prose, they all felt like they could have been novels on their own. The artwork was obviously fantastic as well throughout, and while it is disappointing to not have the artwork fully finished, I am still very very appreciative of its existence. It's clear that Farewell Wanderlust had such an overwhelming amount of love put into it though, so thank you for the awesome story.
A Wolf in Headlights jam comments · Replied to Applied Existence in A Wolf in Headlights jam comments
I agree, it probably could have used a bit more padding in their conversations, but I also wanted to keep a tight narrative without much fluff. Reading back now, it would have been nice to have a little more casual conversation, as things happen back to back rather quickly. I appreciate the feedback, and thanks for taking the time to read, Cybersalmon!
Wacky what the hell?! That was the most wild VN I've ever read, hands down! You are really living up to your screen name with this one!
There's really a lot to unpack here with the characters and plot... I ultimately view this as a fetish piece, so I'm not going to read too much into the implications of all of the crazy stuff happening. I wasn't really sure what to be feeling as a reader since there were so many mixed messages being sent by the narrative, so I tried to bury my disdain for Brutus' abuse and just have fun, which was a bit of a strange and unsettling feeling.
I will say, Brutus is really pretty, and I can't emphasize enough how impressive your artwork and animations are! All of the characters have very great designs, and there's tons of little goodies in there that made me explore every choice. I also appreciated seeing the references to your other works, and the homage to the May Wolf artists as well.
The Japanese setting was also fun, and there's some interesting commentary about Paris in there too... :)
Overall, Escort had me hooked the entire time for better or worse, making me feel the entire spectrum of emotions: joy, anger, sadness, confusion, laughter, shock, arousal... So for that reason, I enjoyed reading it tremendously.
A simple, short, yet beautiful story featuring Nova and Al as powerful characters. The portrayal of love and fear is stunning, and none of the submissions so far have affected me as deeply as this one. I wish it were a little longer, and the script could benefit from a more thorough proofreading. The art, music, and sprites are greatly appreciated; your style is truly original. Bravo!
I like the fantasy setting and the main cast has a lot of personality, even though they swear A LOT. The way the characters interact and deal with magic is pretty cool, and you cram a lot of lore in the short story. I do wish it was longer, though, as the world is genuinely intriguing. Needs some polish with the missing assets and the abrupt ending, but has lots of great things going for it overall.
Hope to see you submit again next year!
And with that, I am done with JMJerbear's submissions! Al and Omri were great, but I would have loved to see things go a little more slowly to flesh out their relationship more. Very unique concept with the videos, though!
All that's left for me to do is find the time to read Pressed. Great job and hope you continue contributing to this community!
Very novel concept with Wesley learning to navigate the world. Overall, I thought it was a very sweet (although perhaps a victim of the word constraints) submission to the jam. I know you worked very hard on it and this is possibly the longest submission, but I still would have loved to see the ending fleshed out a little more. Those paw pads are so boopable as well, and I loved the little stargazing VFX. Thank you for the enjoyable read!
See you, space potato.
Naw, I get it for sure! It’s a good thing if most of the feedback are things that can be remedied with time! Moar artwork! Make it longer! I want to know more about X!
And meanwhile you have been spending every second of your free time working on this for the past month.
It’s so impressive and lovely that you and many of the other devs here are able to produce such high quality products given that our games are driven by passion not profit.
Drug is bad. Wolf is good.
Very ambitious project in terms of the amazing art, super cute wolf, and funny dialogue. This is also probably the entry that integrates the theme of expansion the most into the plot. The humor and the horniness are what stood out most to me. Lots of funny bits (and sexy bits) in the story. Overall an extremely creative story!
The only thing I was missing out of it was that with all the teasing, the main couple's intimacy could have been more fleshed out. The part where they finally get together is basically just a few sentences and a black screen. Can't fault you too much for that though, since there are so many unique and hand drawn assets made in such a short time.
I would highly recommend that everyone reading this play this game!
Bien joué, Wacky!!!!
Okay. Gonna go full ramble here so I do apologize. One More Light just gives me a lot of thoughts and I wanna get them out.
Firstly, your VN is easily the most ambitious one I've seen so far in the submission. You put so much work in it like wow. There are so many powerful things about the story, and obviously the music, presentation, artwork, content is all top notch! This is the most technically impressive VN in the jam (other than Wayward Tower, which you also worked on lol). There are so many cool little effects and the overall presentation is just phenomenal.
The artwork is mostly lovely and it's cool to see so many custom edits to the May Wolf assets. There is a little bit of issue in that the characters are drawn by different artists, but I don't think it's a big deal at all. The bedroom background and changes to it were very, very good. But I will say it is weird to go from natural looking backgrounds, to well-done MS Paint style backgrounds, to photos of vehicles, to scenes with actual human beings in them (ew!). The backgrounds also have varying levels of blur and censorship to them. What I'm trying to get at here is a project is more immersive if the stylistic choices remain consistent. People want that consistent aesthetic in the content they consume.
As for the dialogue and narrative, the depression parts were absolutely gripping. The lost of sense of time, passion, well-being are all relatable to anyone who has gone through that sort of thing, and the internal monologue was deep and thought provoking.
That being said, I do have a lot of concerns about the writing. And I am saying this because I care about this project and want to see it blossom into something beautiful. There is SO much potential here!!!
Okay so it feels like this is 5 different VNs stitched in one. The slice life aspect, the depression aspect, the detective aspect, the supernatural aspect, the romance aspect... All of this is converging into one here and the pacing feels very awkward because it feels like I am reading a totally different story from scene to scene. I would suggest a restructuring of the novel, or at least the order in which information is divulged to us.
My number one suggestion ... I would actually love to see Cal be made into a full protagonist. Mikkel is so mentally distant for the scenes with his friends anyway that it doesn't feel like he's a proper narrator at these moments. We see touches of Cal's concern, his care, his love, and his perspective would more throughly develop the scenes in which he is present.
Because of the constant genre shifts, I think cycling the POVs more often would help us adjust to the theme changes. Basically, it helps the reader know what mood and tone to expect when the scene starts.
The pacing of scenes is quite a bit off. The introduction to Mycroft was off-putting to me, as he sort of materalized in the middle of a parking lot. I was not expecting a new character, one with unique art, to show up that far into the narrative just out of nowhere. What he has going on is super cool, I just want his introduction to be eased into us more. Maybe at the party or when they are at the dock, we could see a brief flash of him in the distance and Mikkel could have a feeling of being watched before shrugging it off. Another good option could be moving the parking lot encounter to BEFORE the room depression arc starts.
The backstory with the parents also felt a little rushed to me. Maybe delve into it more gradually and pepper in some forshadowing about it before we get the full flashback.
The writing also frequently shifts from having character dialogue exclusively to getting lost in description. I would like to see the narrative tone be more layered, with descriptions of environments, the narrator's internal thoughts, and character's physical reactions being more interlaced with the dialogue. Another thing that stood out to me was all the fact/trivia dumping. While it is cool to learn these things, the main goal of the story should be to either develop the character or advance the plot. You don't want to get too sidetracked into the little things that ultimately aren't important.
Rant over! Obviously I wrote so much because I am very fond of this work. Please please PLEASE continue working on this project!