hiya here are some notes i took while reading this one!
first impression i am immediately in love with the art here. particularly the two riders on the front panel.
ooh hell yeah... that's how you write a last sentence in a summary (off to the races section). i was following the story so far and that last bit hit me like a... well it hit me like rufus and amelia hit that curve, lemme tell ya. no joke, when i was a kid i had a nightmare i was playing mario kart and my ghost data could bump me off the track. haven't thought about that in a while!!
"sleeping with the stars, outside an airlock, with aluminum shoes" THIS IS SO GREAT. A++ space mafia one-liner, no notes
i love the whole setup leading up to the big race, and the twist once you're in there is satisfying and thrilling.
because i am corny i would not be able to resist at some point having an NPC say "in the language spoken on G'Sliiiit, they call him... the lamborghini diablo." i already regret writing that out loud
would be cool to add "effects" to the types of bumps the devil does! like a tail bump makes speed easier but int harder, etc.
really enjoyed this read! your sense of humour is great on both this and it talks, im now looking forward to an entire suite of G'sliiit madness to read :)