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While I'm pretty let down by the visual treatment, I think this is some of the strongest writing and execution in the jam! The "under the surface" theme is echoed in several areas of the module, and it functions really effectively as both a narrative adventure and a primer for a full-ass shore leave destination.

You can piece together the truth in a variety of ways and there's something interesting around every corner.  You've a good few sessions of sandbox play packed into this one and that's a hard bargain to beat. Cirrus Station could be plugged into any campaign and it would be well worth the detour!

Thank you for your feedback, I really appreciate it. I was pleased with the writing and wanted the theme to reappear on a few different levels. I agree that the visual treatment leaves something be desired. If you don’t mind me asking, which specific visual elements detracted from the overall piece?

Separately as I’ve been reviewing the other entries I’ve realized taking a graphic design class would be really beneficial. It’s definitely an area I can develop and grow into.

Happy to expand! Here's the big three for me.

  • The Map. It's got a reliance on basic shapes that breaks my immersion in the atmosphere of the writing. Especially the starburst for the Dream Eater and the cloud elements are just too identifiable as "basic shapes" from a design program vs. bespoke visual elements for a particular module.
  • Text Frames. The white-transparent look is a bit dry when there's so much colour in the background. I also feel like the text hugs really closely to the edges of the frames at the top and bottom edges, while the sides are getting more breathing room.
  • Backgrounds. Stock imagery for backgrounds is not my preference, so this is more subjective, but I feel it'd help to slap some grainy, analog, horror-style filters on them to take them away from photorealism and more into the realm of "graphical/textured.

Happy to chat more on solutions and stuff via DMs if you're interested!

I appreciate you highlighting these opportunities for me, thank you. I will shoot you  a DM, it would be great to chat more!