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hey thanks, glad you...  liked it?  did you like it?

imo, showing the moment would detract from the story — which is about the conflicting ways everyone feels about it.  if the reader witnessed it themselves first, they'd likely form their own impression of it and then decide who is "right" or "wrong", but a big theme is that that doesn't actually matter.  also, part of what clover struggles with is that it's been so long that she doesn't remember the details clearly, so she can't quibble over them — and the reader is in the same position!

Um I was kinda mixed on it, but I didn't want to lampoon you with criticism, as it wouldn’t be fair to do so. And I do wish you luck with your further endeavors.

But like I said, just don’t show the moment but summarize it. As it’s confusing to a first time reader as I don’t know if you're mentioning something that happened in another visual novel or something that happened in the lore of floraverse. I’m not a floraverse fan, so when I’m not told about the event I’m assuming it either some preexisting lore or part of some other floraverse property.

But be and my gf did yap some bit about the story, and we approached it from differing angles as she was more knowledgeable, so idk.

for what it's worth, the intention is that it should be readable even if you've never heard of floraverse at all