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Thank you so much! Always on the hunt for where I've blanked on my typing. As for missing commas I'd like to know - some may well be stylistic, I spend far too long thinking about whether I'm using too many or too few commas in my sentences.

Alright then, these are some that I noticed.

Most of the missing commas are right before a form of address:


Get in here, lad.

Come along then, darlings.


Wait here, loves.


Would you, dear?


Come along, boy.


You'll be back, right?

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Also found another typo:


Should be "The Scion fidgets".

Sorry if this is too much or too pedantic! Wanted to reiterate that this was a very sweet story :)

Much appreciated!