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Thank you for the update. I'll scan through and see what mistakes I can find. Besides the "Aster to Astor" error, was there any specific spots in the text where characters were speaking the wrong lines?

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I don’t remember the exact spot but I think it was in the middle of the story.

Thank you. I found the section where the characters were speaking each other's lines. I also fixed the name tags not showing and fixed what grammar problems I could find. I'll do another sweep of the script again to make sure everything is right.

Hey! Sorry to bother you, I just wanted to ask something. I'll be touching up on the story and art for the anniversary of this VN, and I wanted to know more from someone more experience than me.

I know the story wasn't good looking back on it and was all over the place. My main focus is bettering the story while keeping beats and character development, but I would love a little insight on what works and what doesn't.

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I’m sorry. I played this almost a year ago and don’t remember much about the VN besides what I wrote in my comments.

You're fine. I knew it was far fetched to expect that you remember anything from it given, yeah it was a year ago. Regardless, thanks for the reply, and I hope revamp proves better than my original build.