Edit: I think my initial comment sounded a bit negative. It was not my intention. I liked the story, music and art. Everything was pretty awesome. But I was set off by not being able to outright tell the guys who acted strange to cool down and give MC some space. Not necessary in an aggressive way. I think it would be to the novel's benefit to add more choices that allow player to react on the situations that look humiliating or inappropriate to them. Like stopping or at least asking Ryu to stop feeding MC. Or kicking/biting/cursing the "sleeping beauty". I know she was immobilized but she could still try to give him a hard time.
I wish you only the best. I think everyone can see how much heart you put into your work. Again the start you made is very impressive. Thank you.