Great work! Congratulations on the release of chapter two. I think there were just a few typos. But I mostly ignored them, since I was more interested in moving forward with the story xD. Just saved one big typo, here:
Keep forgetting to mention a funny thing from my playthrough. I named my character Uli starting from the first act. I was shocked when in the second act one merperson called his pet by the same name! At first I thought it was intentional and related to the plot, LOL. Unfortunately, nobody ever noticed that our names were matching.
"Good. Let's suit up then." That's all The Templar says before turning and stepping into the nearby building that houses the radioactive suits.
You let out a harsh breath. The trip to The Outpost and back will take just shy of a week. If The Marked Ones or the elements don't kill The Templar, you might just do the job yourself.
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There is no continuation nor sign that the demo is over.
I went through the demo again. And realised my comment about choices was harsh. There were not many occasions when I had a lack of choices. Sorry, for being rude. But there were times when I wanted a bit of humour or submissivness in choices. As overall I wanted to play a character who hides her feelings from anyone she's not very close to. Be it through the means of silence, smiles, lies or jokes. I understand that answers are used for building MC's personality. So I think an option to "think" the answer that corresponds to the actual feelings of MC from time to time would work for that. Also, in the route with W I wanted an option to show the trust in their decision as a commander when a fight is started, instead of arguing and putting men who are fighting for us already in more danger. While still being sensitive to W's injuries and dangers of their job.
Ah, I don't want to be the one who says something unpleasant. But the choices in demo seemed very restricted a lot of the time. I believe there will be more eventually. In the current state it was mostly two choices. One that always felt like "the correct one", and second - as to quickly move on. I am not saying that that having just to choices is bad. No, sometimes it is even absolutely necessary. Just a bit more of the personality variation would be welcome now an then. As it was in the first game. Again, I have a strong feeling that this will be implemented in the full game.
I would also appreciate the codex to give a bit more information on the main character. Such as short physical description and psycological profile like in the first game. It would help with roleplaying different stories. I do not aime to impose this change on you. It's just a thing that came to mind after creating a different character for replay.
I think making a demo in ChoiceScript could help you decide. At the very least working on it will show you what works and what doesn't. There are novels from CoG that actually do have a save option. It could be that the authors simply chose to not include it in their work, aiming for "replayability" 🤔.
Personally, I prefer Twine. CoG novels often don't have the save option, which is a crime for huge projects with permanent death options (and I will died on this opinion xP). Besides, I think that for continious projects one have to have a CoG account to save the progress for the next game.
Additionally, I like what your project looks like right now, its aesthetics and the music. I acknowledge all the efforts put into the styling of fonts, sound FX and transitions. But I only play on PC and cannot vouch for other people's exerience, neither for your convinience. You should do what you think is best :) As long as I don't have to create yet another account somewhere (like CoG) to play a game, I will be fine.
Nice work. Had me worrying at a time when I started loosing my points xD. It's a neat idea to make players think on their actions. If a may add a suggestion for the future, I would like an option for showing text without the animation, or to set the speed of the animation. Thank you.
I know this is beyond late reply. But I think if you press "F" it should resize the screen. This works on all Ren'Py games. Though, sometimes you need to change your keyboard input (layout) to English prior to doing that.
Ouch! You have to get more "you" time to rest and rejuvenate. I know you are passionate and responsible about what you do. But health won't become better if you ignore the signs. I had wrist pain during my studies, and I ignored it for hours and months, because of the pressure the studies put on me. And it didn't not pay out! I still have problems holding a mouse for long or scrolling 4 years :( I cannot play games as I used to (only can play with controller, which is a huge luck), and typing gets hard pretty soon. I was diagnosed with muscle strain that had become chronic, because I didn't let it heal while it was still possible. So, please, heed my advice: DON'T IGNORE YOUR PAIN. Pain killers are not a solution, rest is. Wishing you the best.
Also, you could try using programs that remind you that you need to rest and stretch during computer time. I used one to forced myself to get rest after every 45 minutes, which is bizarre when you're concentrating on something, but it did help me reduce the pain, especially not having the pain at night and being able to sleep. Now, if I use the program, it drives me mad sometimes with those annoying reminder messages xD, but I can work at computer and avoid health complications.
One of my favorites of all time. Will always have that special place in my heart. There is mystery and romance, there is comedy and tragedy, there is magic and strong characters - everything a good story needs. More over, every path you take is different. You can have that happily ever after, bittersweet, tragic or evil-and-I-love it ending, all to your heart's content.
I love it! Glad to see it's here. There are so many things and possibilities. It's the only novel with stats progression that feels natural to me.
Oh, I'd like to mention that there are, on my opinion, 7 good endings. And despite the tag "dating sim", you don't have to date anyone to achieve a good ending. The story is more about pursuing what you like. You can even change your mind in the middle of the game and not get punished like in the other games where you need to solely focus on some specific stats only.
P. S.: Don't forget to change your clothes. Or do forget, because this is hilarious :D
