Excellent work! The world feels bigger than what we see here, which is impressive given the length. I have to echo other commenters here: I'd love to see more of this in future jams.
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The Siege of Holmtauer's itch.io pageResults
| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Flow & Clarity | #6 | 4.045 | 4.045 |
| Adherence to the Theme | #10 | 3.818 | 3.818 |
| Overall | #11 | 3.818 | 3.818 |
| Concept & Originality | #26 | 3.591 | 3.591 |
Ranked from 22 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
Comments
A very well-written and engaging straightforward battle scene.
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Hidden in the DepthsThanks so much! While the siege itself isn't directly based on a tabletop scenario, the characters of Baldwin and Goregut are directly inspired by some of the miniatures in my collection. I was in the final stages of painting Goregut (a "Destroyer Pig" for Relic Blade) when I heard about the OPR Writing Jam, so he was my initial inspiration. I might throw the siege scenario at my D&D group though!
Overall great flow and good focus on two enemy combatants despite the battlefield nature, would look forward to a continuation to this and expansion on the first two days in future Jams.
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Denial & DeathLoved this, I appreciate the tactical use of explosives. Made the reversal of fortune more satisfying. The ending line was fun as well. I'll be looking for your submission next jam.
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The War TableA really good jaunt. Especially liked the ending merely being the beginning of their epic showdown leaving the reader to imagine what happens next. Bravo.
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Lend Me Your EarsI love how vivid your descriptions were. Made me realize I gotta be more in depth with my stuff.
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