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| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Adherence to the Theme | #11 | 3.796 | 3.895 |
| Concept & Originality | #12 | 4.053 | 4.158 |
| Overall | #12 | 3.813 | 3.912 |
| Flow & Clarity | #18 | 3.591 | 3.684 |
Ranked from 19 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
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LOVED THIS!
Sad ending, but well earned. Probably one of the best stories I’ve read so far.
I may have to… ahem… “borrow” this setting for the AoF RPG I’m making.
This might be my favorite one so far! Characterization was incredibly well done, you brought life and individuality to a host of characters in a very very small time, which is impressive. You also built some excellent back story for the characters and insinuated a coming conflict that really brought the story to life. Well done!
Oooh! Ratmen vs the deep! Good story. Great actors. Loved it! Mousehold was indeed a neat detail.
thank you so much
Taking what is often a "horde" army and making use of a small section of them is a really neat idea. I love the individuality put into the rats as they face their foe, and showing them at the start doing something more menial than just fighting. The theme really shines through, and I finished the story trying to work out who was the intelligent one and who was relying on strength more but in a good way, with the twisting of the two concepts in both foes.
thanks for the kind review. I appreciate the positive feedback. :)
Loved the descriptions of the characters! you may just make me print a ratman army
Every gamer Mousehold should have some clanrats haha.
Nice work! I like all the tension building all culminating to an 'Ah...fuck' moment.
thanks. Im glad the tension came across. I was worried it might not.
Great job! I enjoyed reading this. I especially liked your naming convention for the Ratmen. Such a fun faction!
thank you. :)
Mousehold, I liked that touch. Interesting concept that I think would have been easier with a longer page count.
i had many, many paragraphs get deleted wholesale haha.
The story started strong, with a well made hook. The play between the two concepts on either side was very neat to read.
haha yeah. The wordcount ate my third act haha
Alas, as the boys would say, "it do be like that." I found myself with a huge gap at the end with all the "As, THEs, OFs, and ITs."