I loved your take on these Saurians! Song/music being so central to the story made me curious about the artistic side of reptilian warriors, something I'd never thought to do before! Kudos for that!
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| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Flow & Clarity | #4 | 4.040 | 4.192 |
| Overall | #15 | 3.682 | 3.821 |
| Concept & Originality | #17 | 3.817 | 3.962 |
| Adherence to the Theme | #29 | 3.187 | 3.308 |
Ranked from 26 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
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Its a very rare thing to see a writing for Lizard folk in any setting that makes them interesting to read. Normally they are portrayed as somewhat void of emotion or very matter of fact (I could mention a very exceptions but that is beside the point).
This short story however does a fantastic job at making the them both feel very appropriate to their roots and yet explores something new and interesting in their mentality. Combined with some fantastic imagery and you have something gold. Love it!
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Duty of a SoldierI loved the use of the mystic and really the whole vibe of the piece.
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Troll MagicThis was a lovely piece of writing. I could practically see the sunset gardens and smell the fruit trees. I picked up on the reflective mood you were going for, and I thought it was well done.
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Glass and LiesI love how singing is such a theme here; very beautiful!
It was difficult to picture the characters, though. I know brevity was part of the challenge but a few more words of description would have been nice. Also, the transition where they beginning walking to the temple felt very abrupt, and I was left wondering what Xochitl was thinking about the silence during there walk!
Overall, I loved the glimpses of the culture in your use of names. There were some beautiful passages!
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He Will Uphold All Who Cherish
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