Hello, im sorry, i got very busy latelly and could not write e proper review for your history. Thank you for taking your time to write me a review. (I will be honest and fair, I dont feel very well judging other people hard work, but when i do, i go with honesty).
Enjoyment (4-5): the history is cool, the setting is nice, i found myself a bit confused when the main character left his box, but could catch up with the action later (and a second read solved the issue). The final scene was well written, and I could feel the agony of the target. It is not a full round 5 due to the confusion around the action, but it is at least a 4,7+.
Originality (3-4): i did not found the story to be that original. The "sacrificial lamb" ship, the super special agent, wich will not fail when everyone else have failed, the endless dream. All cool ideias that you tied together very well, but none of them "surprising".
Adherence to the Theme (3): the "endless loop" appears only at the final scene, and even when it appears it is not really endless. The target just experience what seens to be an endless loop for some time, enough to disable him and let the agent finish the job... I felt the agony of the target entering the endless loop, just to realize he would be relieved from that fate a minute later...
Thank you for writting it, was fun to read, and would have been translated very well into a more visual media (like comics or short movie). Congratulations :)
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