Hi I am part of the streamers participating in the Feedback Quest. The VOD of me playing this on stream is up.

This game is exemplary. Amazing, I have little words for it. I feel the game wears its inspirations on its sleeves and feels very engaging to play. Even unfinished and such, it felt engaging. I would enjoy playing this very much. 

My few gripes would first be with the Princess' name. It does not need to always be named in full I think. Its fine just keeping it as Princess or soemthing. At some point it just becomes a Tongue Twister. The other issue I felt was the Background was a bit saturated and didn't feel right. Maybe lower the overall saturation a bit. The characters were all good and simple. I loved it all but maybe there should be somet added effects on them. Like maybe different versions lit up based on the background they're in. Something to keep the immersion going because the colour of the art is Pastel-ish, the background has a more dynamic colour range and these two elements clash. HOWEVER make no mistake, I believe a VN is carried by both its art and story and I feel that both the art and story here hold their own with more emphasis on story. Its just subtle updates to the art could boost the quality a bit higher. 

Overall, I feel a genuine love for the genre and this game is a good example of how to make a good Visual Novel. This meets the standard and has the potential to far exceed it. Please keep up the amazing work and I hope to see more.

Hello! I was one of the streamers who took part in Feedback Quest, and I'm here to leave some comments I had while playing.

Originally, I had the plan to judge this game primarily on its logic for who the murderer is. However, since the game is not finished I'm unable to do this (or at least I couldn't on the path I took). I do hope that if you submit this to a future Feedback Quest that there will be at least one complete path to allow for judgement on that.

I felt the intro text went very fast. I would like to see it slowed down so it can be read in full (especially if someone is streaming it as I was). I also felt that some word choices were a bit confusing. However, this could be a result of translating. I also felt it was awkward when Anastasia was being called "Princess Anastasia Konstantina" in narration without any shortening, to the point where on my stream I started making a joke of saying her name very fast so I could move on. It makes sense when speaking to her, but not in narration.

While I like the art style and generally liked the artwork, I did feel like most of the cast were drawn in ways that didn't match with how they should have looked. Joseph's artwork made him look like a child despite him being only a couple years younger than most of the other patients. Most of this alternate cast looked like teenagers to me rather than adults in their mid to late 20s.  When I eventually read that Emilia was supposed to be from India, it made no sense to me because of how light her skin is. Meanwhile, in all of this you have Dr. Adenauer who is supposed to be in his 50s but looks like he's over 70. Also, Anastasia has a huuuuuuuuuuuge forehead. I couldn't stop staring at it. D:

Very good game, very long and substantial demo that I was unable to finish else missing out on reviewing other entries, however I did get very far, and I did get to the point with the three girls. I think you have fantasic writing that I admire, I also appreciated your landing page was very attractive and well constructed. The story was intreging and I don't usually get a lot of time to play visual novels, this one hooked me in and I'll be playing more later in my own time. 

Sound is great, I thought the music on the Emilia interrogation section dragged on a little to long and could have been supplimented with some change, silence or sound for effect, in comparison I think the beginning really uses sounds well so you could use that as a point of reference. Otherwise amazing work, please keep it up, I'd love to see you continue this.

Streamed this for 1.5 hour got to the cliff hanger on deciding between the poor Cecil and Fredrick on who to lock while seriously suspecting a third option. I will feature the game as stand alone on my YT later. 

I agree with The last secret that I wasn't very sure if I was a male or female in the beginning until I see my name later, (I got lost on what kind of voice I need to find as well as a streamer) 

I also agree that BG styles would look better if it's done differently, AI art can be considered as long as you want to keep the game free and not commercial so you don't run into any legal issues. 

I think the story was intriguing for me to want to know who killed the professor, but there is an issue as that I completely have NO IDEA who the victim is and I can't picture his importance and relevance unless it's through other characters and his title, then my motivation would be to save myself or maybe the princess from any suspicion but the game didn't reach to that direction which would be more emotionally engaging, it's a mere suggestion but if we can see the professor in an inserted party scene before it all happens it will help a lot story wise for the player, and if not too costly, a way to put the player in more danger so it's more keeping the player on the edge of their seat trying to get to the end of the story. 

I have my own suspect, for the sake of the story I could not choose my true choice where I stopped, that was a bit frustrating as the player and that did dim my interest a bit to continue, just thought the emotional feedback would be important. 

So, I finally had time to play the game. There are quite a few things I like about it  the setup, the music, the funny names (Ribeyrolles! – really?! :), the way information is not only presented, but also summarized in the story.

I have, however, a few ideas how to improve the game:

Story:

- At the start, it was unclear to me who I am. Much later I also noticed that there is background information to all characters in the menu. I did not inspect that to be relevant.

- The story is sometimes a bit lengthy. At the beginning, A gets B then C to get D to finally open the door... That's confusing and strange. There are other places where shortening would be easy. (Why first discuss on the corridor that you want to discuss in the music room, e.g.? Let them meet there immediately!)

- The story also jumps sometimes in weird directions. It's particularly hard to follow at the beginning. It's not clear to me why the protagonist is called to the room by Dr. Adenauer or why Emilia's suspicion towards Dr. Adenauer is not taken up by anybody else, but instead suddenly ignored. Also, the nurses are suspicious (the twin sisters only give each other alibis) which is completely ignored, although plain obvious.

- I think some aspects, like the differences between nobility and "ordinary people" are not quite fitting to the time. There should be way more distance or at least the lack thereof should be a big thing in the story.

- The professor is a bit unrealistic. More like people who have no idea about professors think professors are like... (So in other words it' not worse than 99% of media professors.) It would help if at least it's clearly stated that he is a professor of philosophy/sociology/whatever, but not a mixture that seem to do everything from math to history. Even around 1900 nobody outside novels was like that anymore. Also, why does he have "students" at the sanatorium? He's sick and not teaching. If need to, call him a "mentor". Being a "student" is quite a formal thing (lectures at university etc.).

- There's way too little player interaction. Interaction does not have to lead to completely different branches, it can just add some flavor here and there. Let the protagonist reply something and give alternatives there. Both can essentially, after a few sentences, go back to the main route, but it gives the player the feeling to be connected with the person and the story. The first interaction is after one hour or so. That's way too late!

- Don't force the player to do things, he doesn't want to do! I would have voted either for Dr. Adenauer or abstained. – And why are the votes not anonymous, by the way?

- ??? for a name should be avoided. It's not necessary here where you know the persons anyway. I know you want to keep the tension a bit who says or does what, but that's not worth breaking the atmosphere with the player reading "???" and being reminded that it's a VN. ;)

Graphics:

- It took me a long time to get the logo (skull with sand clock). Good idea, but basically too hard to recognize, I'm afraid. (At least for me.)

- I personally would prefer a better fitting font for the text. Something that looks older, like Times (with serifs if you know what I mean).

- The bg style is consistent and OK, but avoid showing close-ups and then present a person in front of it. That looks weird.

- The sprite style is also consistent and OK, but not great.

- Both styles clash quite a bit, so I'm not sure whether I like this: the bg is dark and gloomy while the sprites are in a cute and cheerful style. I like anime style, so I would rather change the bg, but the bg is probably what is fitting better ti the rather gloomy story.

- The map should look hand-written, as it was indeed hand-made...

- When a person talks, there's this nice bouncy effect, but then the lower boundary of the sprite shows...

Sound:

- Nice music, but overused: there are long passages with the same song repeating. It's totally fine in such a slow paced VN with lots of thinking to pause the music for a while and turn it back on for the emotional or suspenseful scenes. (I turned it completely off eventually, and I'm in general quite tolerant to background music.)

Sorry, for so much criticism. I'm sure you planned to improve many of these things anyway, but thought I'd share them with you anyway!

Good luck with your game! :)