YOU SHOULD HAVE CALLED IN A PROOFREADER!

Overall, you have an issue of putting past and present tense into the same sentence often, you repeat words (there was a paragraph with 5 always's) and there were some smaller mistakes. 

That amount of text looks like it was a huge undertaking. So BRAVO for that. 

The actual mission that the coterie went on could have used more choices. 

<3 you did good cookie.