Overall I think this has some really good potential for the future, I just think their are some things that could be tweaked or improved. In most of the dialogue, I personally think there are too many complex/large words, It sort of makes it difficult to follow along with as you have to pause every now and then to remember the meaning of the word. That and i think the pace is a bit too quick, there is a lot of things happening within a short period of time which leads to a bit of information overload and makes it difficult to absorb the story and really get immersed with it. Other than that though, the artwork is beautiful, the MC dialogue feels very natural and free flowing, not forced or clunky like how some VNs are. I believe just adding some small scenes where Ran and the MC interact in a more casual setting, like them going on the first mission to the cave would do a world of good. Excited to see new updates and how the story unfolds