Overall it could be good, the writing and grammar is terrible and they could really do with reading some novels and making a more coherent power system and to make the cultural and societal aspects more accurate, it feels like an extremely bad MTL novel.
The MC is also a prancing clown and ruins the story completely, not a pragmatic bone in his body and is unintelligent and useless, so far the romance/harem options just like him for no reason, there are no redeeming qualities so its superficial and there aren't any genuine bonds either, they are all pretty one dimensional due to the presentation and story telling.
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