One of the VNs that first got me into reading visual novels! Love this VN; the art is great and the light-hearted and chill vibe is very nice.

My only issue is with the dialogue. Basically throughout the VN in every route, it is doing way too much telling instead of showing. The characters have a habit of saying their entire thoughts on things. While sometimes people do say their whole thoughts, the amount of times it happens and the way it happens can be a bit jarring. The characters are way too good at verbalizing their thoughts and go into way too much depth when explaining them to people. This can make it feel more like the author is explaining the character's thoughts to the reader rather than the character expressing their thoughts and the reader interpreting them themselves. 

Characters also have an issue of repeating themselves, not necessarily the same exact wording, but characters will get the same point across multiple times which can make conversations drag on. For example, in Dwayne's route when Dwayne, Maria, and Eric are talking about how Eric has to go to practice and Dwayne and him can't go on the date they planned to do. In this conversation, Dwayne says he hopes it monsoons but then explains that if the weather is bad, Eric won't have to go to practice and they can go on their date. He is overexplaining his thoughts that was already implied in a previous line. Dwayne already hoped for a monsoon, which more than enough to get his point across, but they're still driving the point home. Characters don't just repeat themselves in the same conversations, but they will repeat themselves in multiple different conversations. For example, in Dwayne's route, they keep mentioning how Dwayne is trying to be very sincere. Dwayne explaining that he wants to be more sincere and the reason why is completely fine, but them mentioning it over and over again further into the route gets a bit tedious. Richard's route also has a good example with Eric's dad telling him he's proud of him again and again.

Something that is part of too much telling instead of showing is the characters using "I'm glad..." or "...so..." too much. In a made up example, characters may say things like "I'm glad everything worked out" or "I did this so this wouldn't happen." These things aren't bad in moderation, but the fact that every character says it very often gets repetitive. Characters expressing that they're glad can be done in more ways like, "Oh, good! Everything worked out", "Thank goodness everything worked out", or even just "Thank goodness", changing the phrasing entirely, etc. The issue with "...so..." is just that it over explains the character's thoughts. Many times it can just be forgoed or said simply as "I did this," implying the "so this would happen" part instead of outright stating it.

Overall, I love this project; the hot men, laid-back vibe, and how much love and effort you've put into it. I'm so excited to see it finally finished and hope my criticisms are used to improve the project. Though, with how these issues are throughout the entire VN, it may be too daunting of a task. Something to remember for future projects either way.