I appreciate the work that went into this, but it wasn't to my liking overall.

What I liked:

• creative UI
• main menu was arranged in a very cool way
• background music provided a fitting ambience
• the auto save feature is a nice decision that gives game choices more weight

What I didn't like:

• a few typos and unusual writing choices that made it a bit difficult to read
• the writing is very verbose. Lots of clicking needed to advance to choices
• the 'go to page x' style of choices felt jarring, compared to how seamless most VNs make choices
• Choices - at least the earliest ones - felt either too transparent or too opaque
• Portrait design leads to small images on desktop

Overall I just didn't want to keep playing after the first few minutes.