While the story isn't finished, this is an excellent debut! The writing is delightful and the story is grounded and familiar, but with its own identity. There are some things that haven't paid off, but I am curious what direction they're taken in (e.g. the focus on tomatoes and nudism). The narrator addressing the ex bf in second person was a delicious setup for the scene with the tomato being throw directly at the camera!
While the writing is strong, the audiovisual elements could definitely use some improvement. The backgrounds are functional but feel very generic and not always appropriate to the scene (e.g. the apartment being flooded with sunlight despite it being nighttime).
And most of the VN is completely silent, although the few exceptions are extremely memorable.
Can't wait for the update!
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