I think you're off to a good start here! I think the setup has worked well and the sort of subversion of an isekai is nice. I think that you could really use an editor to go over your work, since there are a number of grammatical and spelling errors that could fairly easily be sifted out- and they could probably help with refining your writing in general. Overall, though, a good start. :)
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