I liked the premise of this VN...a focus on the sea, a cute dragon-bird sea deity, and a forbidden romance with Little Mermaid vibes.
Unfortunately, the best parts of this VN are buried under so much exposition and text that everything gets muddled. Sometimes, the sentence structure is very similar line to line, which leads to this muddling effect.
Especially in the second chapter, we get into a " Ranok cabin" / "Lyre bedroom" segment with characters talking for a long time. I feel like cutting half the text of this VN would streamline the story significantly and help the plot to shine more.
I think this VN would benefit from an editor; in its current state, though, this VN does not hold my attention.
1.5/5
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