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JonSpencerReviews rated Dungeon PicNic

A downloadable game.

Thank you for submitting to the Jam & Toast game jam! I hope you had as much fun making your game as I did playing it. I'd like to take a moment to offer some feedback and suggestions privately based on my experience with the game should you choose to adjust or further develop it in the future.

First off, I found the game to be fairly fun once I understood the rules. My main point of criticism is that the rulebook is a little confusing. I wasn't sure how utensils worked, for example, and had to read the rules a couple of times over before I really understood how they worked.

Two things would help improve clarity in the future:

  1. I'd ask someone else to proofread the rules and ask you questions on anything they might be confused on. This might seem obvious and you maybe even did this already, but having a few people do this would help catch things you might have missed or didn't consider. Forgive me if I'm wrong, but English didn't seem like your first language and that likely contributed to what I was feeling if it was the case.
  2. A play example would be really helpful. If you "played" a hypothetical floor of the game with a picture or two, this would also help players understand how everything works.

That's really the only "negative" I have for you. The cards are clean, I was able to intuit how a lot of things worked, and the encounters are just different enough for a short experience. You have a modular design so this could easily be expanded or built upon if desired, which is something I love to see.

Keep up the good work and thank you once again for participating in the jam!