This, being what it was, was actually pretty okay.
It's not supposed to be anything crazy or ground breaking, just a cute and simple story you can read in 30 minutes, and in that regard it does a great job.
It's for yuri game jam but this is about as shoujo ai as you can get. No real romance even implied beyond blushing which happens like twice, so if you're in it for potential yuri then you'll be disappointed.
I think it's a cute story as it was intended, and if you've got like 15-25 minutes to blow and aren't looking for anything serious then maybe give this a read.
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