AWW I LOVE THIS VN SO MUCH! I feel like you did a good job with the pacing and length because it felt complete to me, it had the right amount of length to address the fantastical elements and also introduction of characters, and finally the set up between Huon and the MC's dynamic and relationship. 

The ending is also cute and hopeful because well, it's a sweet promise of the future that'll come, and I just melt at how Huon treats MC as the story progresses because he looks so damn soft with MC. Absolutely sweetheart material!