As much as I enjoyed this, this project's a bit rough around the edges.

It's a bit rushed. You don't like to linger in a scene, and this kind of narrative I think could stand to stand around a bit longer to make the build-up to the ending more satisfying.  Give us time to be like the mushrooms, and set roots and then have them lifted in an untimely fashion.

Our mushroom queen could have stood to be a lot more mushroom-y too.

While I enjoy the idiosyncrasies of your narrative voice, I think they occluded some of the character development, expressing items that we don't quite get to see on the character.

I did quite enjoy your usage of the rain, the overall concept (mushroom colony queen corpse takeover? We stan, of course), your choice in music, but the pacing and structure I think were a bit too rough to let your idea fully shine.

I'm excited for whatever you do further nonetheless.