For what it was trying to build up. I think this is a good story if it was not within the restrictions of O2A2. It needs more content and needs more around just these 1K words.

As short as it is, I couldn't get any feelings for them or any relation with them. They were just there in that situation. That's how I give 4 stars.

I'll be waiting for the long version of this VN. Sounds like that would make a more interesting read and view. You have something interesting here that can grow.