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Phoenixsylvan@gmail.com rated Magical Harvest - demo

A downloadable game.

Yay! I love farm sims. This game looks super pretty/beautiful I loveee the art/graphics so much!
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some general (detailed) feedback on writing/presentation/story content that might help: 

That place for where the forest looks now/vs 100 years before is a much better example (with camera panning to a sky or something upward and a fade in/out of the two scenes when going over the story in the intro, it gives a bigger/better scene instead of just the lake where it's hard to see the forest! 

Or written a bit different to capture your audience "Nature in this land, that was once flourishing with an abundance of life, now cursed and withering, the land could fall to famine and spread across the land if not restored to the magic it once was" for example, and maybe a little "I found out from stories, legends, but I wasn't sure if it was real for myself. Or, I heard from a traveling bard, and he said: "" or, learning from a family member, adventurers etc, prophecy, idk something--so we know why the mc left the city/their current life to save this place, or believing they could restore it. Even if it's cliche it's fine. "Something, I could feel within me, a premonition, calling me to this land, I heard a voice, it said: 'You must restore these lands, or the world will surely fall to ruin'" because it's still capitivating, and exciting. 

You can TOTALLY ignore these suggestions if it's not the direction you want/you don't want feedback, I'm just a writer so I'm obsessed with these kinds of things! x) I love writing stories/dialogue so I can't help but delve deep into it. Absolutely beautiful work and I can't wait to see more.