Posting a quiet review instead of a public comment for this, because I just want to give the author a friendly aside here. While I think this has good bones, I see some room for improvement; specifically, I want to politely recommend that the author brush up on their formatting skills.

I would have loved to read this in one sitting, but I had trouble getting through my PDF copy because of the way the text was set. There are a few different formatting quirks that made it hard to read.

What gave me the most trouble was that the text was single-spaced, unindented, and there were extra spaces between paragraphs seemingly at random. Overall, the lines were too close to each other to make for a comfortable reading experience. When I opened up the EPUB for comparison, I found the same design.

By no means is this a badly story; it's just a story that could use some formatting help. Here are some potential improvements.

• Set the linespacing to 1.5 or double-spaced.
• Set your base text style to automatically line break after each paragraph.
• Indent each paragraph.
• When showing a break between scenes, use a centered divider of some kind instead of an empty line.
• (Optional, and mostly aesthetic.) Center the title & author name, and set the title in a fitting display font instead of the same font as the basic text. Make the title larger than the rest of the text.

For more elaboration on readability, consider reading this page; https://solaria.neocities.org/readability.

I hope this criticism isn't too out-of-line. This story just happened to end up in the hands of someone with an intense typography interest. Happy to see where you go from here!