A fairly weak start to the story, I must say. I don't feel particularly drawn in and interested. On top of that, there are some more faults at play here. The first, and I think only actual BUG that I encountered was not being able to input a custom name. The box simply would not respond to my typing. Particularly in the beggining, the character customisation feels very forced and the frequency of choices is a little bit overwhelming, not allowing the reader to fully immerse into the story before being broken away with a choice to make. With that, the story feels a bit barren. Perhaps the paragraphs could be a little longer, or the sentences more elaborated. The issue is not in the details, the random yet VERY personal details are much to write home about; but something in the writing feels lacking, I can't quite put my finger on it. 

However, I still think this story holds great promise. There is so much GOOD here aswell, it's a shame that it's a little dull with the issues presented above. I'm sorry if I sounded a bit harsh at first, but I really hope that you can use this constructive critisism. That being said, praise is in order! As mentioned before, the little details are what really make the story and it's characters. I love how you didn't shy away from making the details VERY specific, lots of writers tend to generalise in order to attempt to make their characters relatable to a wider variety. However, I think the approach that you have taken actually makes the characters MORE relatable, it makes them feel like real people and that is a great feat for a writer to achieve.  I can't quite decide whether this is the intended purpose yet, it being only a demo, but I think I can spot some clever foreboding yet subtle foreshadowing in the writing, it certainly creates an uneasy stirr. The metaphors here are outstanding, and I find that particularly charming as someone who LOVES a good metaphor in writing; especially when describing emotions and experiences! It is clear to me that you have a particular talent with metaphors and describing a character's emotion and experiences. Infact, here are some parts of the writing so-far that have paticularly struck me as great: 

"You would do the same as a child, trying somehow to meet him there across space and time as you watched the sky become a watercolour of orange and red"

" "Of course not," she scoffs, "Who do you think I am-?" She cuts herself off, but you already know the end of that sentence. You're familiar with the phrase, the gentle ribbing of the tone. 

Who do you think I am? Morgan? 

Kiran's next words are rushed, coming out a bit choked, "

(This one in paticular caused my heart to sink and my gut to wrench) 

"Not today. Today is raw and your heart is bleeding and you can't do it today"