Firstly, I have no complaints about the writing. There is a lack of content to be judged, but I did enjoy what was there. 

That said, your styling of the way this twine game is presented needs work. Most importantly links being both the same color, and the same font makes using things like cycling options unintuitive. You should probably set the links to new passages, and those choices made by cycling a different color than the rest of the text.

In light mode they are highlighted in green, but in dark mode they're only slightly bolder than the rest of the text. There was a real inconsistency with options too: some cycle when you click on them, some are in a list, some are in drop-down menus.

I had to restart twice because I'd missed an option in character creation before swapping to light mode, and once because on the page you choose your origin (only 1 at the moment of course) it only tells you what the page is for right at the bottom... so I saw some highlighted text and presumed it was a cycling option like the times before. Nope! Took me into the rest of the story. So I restarted only to find out it was the only option anyway.

I agree that the story potential is fab! Could just do with some formatting adjustments to make the experience of reading it better.