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looking for feedback on my first project/zine!

A topic by misiflight created Jul 12, 2023 Views: 141 Replies: 2
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zine here - it's a trans poem/zine 

i'd like some feedback on things like the formatting, how well it reads, if the core concept is understandable, whether it's resonant or a bit twee, etc - i'm somewhat used to writing poetry, but this is the first time i've either made a zine at all or tried to upload anything to here. i know most of the feedback is wrt games, but if you're interested, i'd really appreciate it!

Visually it’s very powerful; I like the black and white graphics and your choice of images to combine (is that Henry the VIII with his face scribbled out?), and the core concept is at once understandable, an angle I haven’t seen before, and convincing. The words on the second spread feel – simple and direct almost to the point of being preachy, but the zine is very effective and I’m glad I read it. As someone else whose creations are (and will continue to be) closer to “zine” than “game” I really appreciated seeing this here!

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i really appreciate that! it was my first zine attempt, and i'm glad it came across well. i'm aware the poem might itself be a little clunky - though i still like it, i wrote it at like 2 am after a graveyard shift, so there's definitely some liminal feeling to it. thank you so much for the feedback!