wow. I was rarely so immersed in a story here. Even the worldbuilding got to me ! Also, glad this is being currently worked on ; I might have not survived had this been abandoned... I want to know what's next !!
I'm totally into this. Great work !
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Oooh ! What a wonderful surprise ! It was nice to dive back in, and I'm glad this is still in progress ! I love this storie and it's characters (okay, maybe especially Matt...)
I hope you're doing well (I can imagine the stress of handling work, life, AND a project) and I'm super excited to read chapter 5 !
Hey ! This has potential, your characters seem cool, I'd be happy to see where the story is going :)
I just have a few questions/remarks : at some point, you go from "you" to "I", and from present tense to past tense. Was it intentional ?
Also, I love the poetic style of the descriptions, but I feel it is sometimes damaged by repetitions of a word from a sentence to another (whisper, echo, groan, weave...) Maybe it's a choice, and a matter of personal taste (I may be the only one bothered by this, if so, apologies) but just in case it's inattention, I thought I'd signal it. I write too, and it's stuff I do sometimes, that's why it caught my eye ^^
Again, I like where this is headed ! And I'm sorry if my comment comes of as rude or harsh, it's not the intention ! I love reading people's stories, and I want to read the rest of yours !
I just wanted to help a bit by sharing some things that stroke me as odd
Have a good day !
Okay, I'm gonna repeat myself ; but WOW
I liked the mini series so f*cking much, I was sooo into it, and immersed with the characters, and the plot, and the montage of it all, like, can you please actually write stuff for netflix or something ? You actually got me sleep deprived because I was so engrossed in your story I kept on reading almost all night ! So much emotions ! And the bittersweet/sadness of it all... Lord !
And even outside of that, I was touched by the talks with Matt and Youssef... and I know I didn't read it all, so there's even more... and the amount of work you put into it ! You even branched the eliminations at the end ! I was wondering if that was gonna happen, and am genuinely impressed. Still sad to see a new character quit the adventure every time... but I can't wait to read the rest of it
Bravo !
Good one ! Although it's criminal to tease us that much with Boris for just a bit of shoulder rubbin' :3
I was expecting lust's influence to help Resnick cave in to his emerging slutty side, but in the end I felt like not influencing him left him sluttier, in a way. It was surprising.
Could be just an impression though
I'll be waiting for the next one ! :)
Yeah, I get that. I remember most of the plots making me laugh, that's one of the reasons I turned towards written pornography.
That's really cool, I don't think most people (me first) see the humans behind porn actors and actresses, and sex workers in general, so big kudos on you for that, really.
Aaw, it's gonna be really cool to read !
By the way, I forgot, but I noticed a few typos ; I hope it's no bother that I report them here, I don't know where I can do it :
A couple of "teh", in Episode 1 I'll make you a star (most of teh time) and in Episode 2 script with Hugo and Yousef (around teh campfire)
Also a couple of "paste", in Episode 1 : Making her like me P2 (way paste that point) and maybe in Episode 2 : Day 2 morning with Damon where I think you meant "keep going at that pace" instead of "at that paste", but I could be wrong, not my native language.
And an "ove" in Episode 2: safe with Hugo and Youssef (i'm ove the fucking moon)
Sorry if you've already corrected them^^`
G'day !
Wow, I really really liked it !
I mean I didn't have any kind of expectations, but man I really got into the characters and I love how you talk about the porn industry and sex workers ! Idk, it feels human. And the concept is good !
Also I kinda noticed I was maybe too much into it when I started debating with myself over the qualities of the movies' plots and concept lmao (God I loved Mommy's Boy ! And I'm gay so I took no pleasure in reading it ! That's a testament to how good your ideas are !)
it was less the case with episode 2, but I just explored the hell out of episode 1 so i was getting kinda tired ><
Anyway. Can't choose between the guys, can't get over the loss of the two eliminated candidates, and can't wait for episode 3 !
Hoping my english is correct, please keep up the good work and... I don't know, live a good life ?
Xo
Hey ! I've only stumbled recently on this game but I loved it instantly ! The universe is really cool, I love all the cast and I could tell you are really invested in your game, it's really a little gem !
Anyway, just wanted to say, love it, love your work, sending you lots of love !
(oh, and to answer the actual post, yeah, the pricing of a ""premium"" double NSFW version does sound fair, you definitely deserve to earn some kind of money with that, especially with the amount of work and passion you put in !)
xoxo!
Wow, I had no idea Chris was meant to have a route ! I always found him especially annoying, and some of his scenes gave me a "seems-nice-but-secretly-psycho" vibe, so that's a surprise !
Following this game purely on itch, I didn't know there were stretch goals too ; I mean, I was kinda hoping with Kane, but the last scene we got with him got rid of any hopes I had, really. Painful to read. Didn't do any good to the shrinking empathy I feel towards Ben, either
Anyway, I hope you'll feel better ! I like the thriller atmosphere of this game, and trying to connect the dots. So, I still think your depth did some good :)
Looking forward to the end of this one and your next projects !
hey ! First of all, love it, this is nice, I wanna see what's gonna happen next ! I really like the fighting system!
I haven't played for long cause I really gotta sleep, but I found a bug in the scene with rin, when losing the card game : "Error: the passage "|nerdCardsDefeatClothed2" does not exist"
I think I went "want to take them off->say nothing", but I'm not entirely sure...
Hope it helps !
'night !
hey ! Been a while since I've checked this game out, it has really grown ! It was one of my first gay VN experiences back then, it's nice to see those routes finished ! And I was surprised to see there are new routes now ! That's cool ! Love your work, I'm glad to see you really stuck with your game for so long, it's heartwarming !
Do we know if there are gonna be other routes later ? (like, one with a certain huge tiger, let's say ? Re-playing Darius' route gave me some cravings XD) Seriously though, how big will it turn out to be ? With Dwayne popping out of nowhere, it really expends the possibilities 0-o
Not that I'd object having more, still a pleasure to read those romances, you made me love so many characters <3
Anyway. Thank you, I guess ?
xoxo !
Absolutely loved it ! my gooooooood !
This is really not good for my crushing-on-Blake situation ! Despite Oliver still being in my heart... but Blake and James are so freaking cute together ! (but also so annoyingly hopeless I just wanted to jump in there and bump their lips together sometimes !)
Although I guess in the end everyone got what they wanted... *wink wink*
So, yeah, that was really cool, can't wait for the rest ! (like aaaaaargh that tension but also don't overwork yourself)
xoxo !
Wow, that's the first notification I receive in (many) months ! I was starting to forget about that, relieved it's still going though ! I missed a lot of stuff !
So, I'm a bit late on the "notification test", but yeah, I got this one
Gonna make up for lost time and read through all the new stuff X)
Night !
Okay, WOW, I was definitely not expecting that. I'm used to smut with some story to go with it, but damn, this is really something more ! I'm really hooked, and I can't wait to play the rest of the game ! I mean the scenes were amazing, but the horror parts were also really good !
This was a very good surprise, even in this early state. Well done ! I'll follow this closely :D
Night !
I'm sorry to hear you had such difficult times, and it's cool to know you're starting to feel better. I wish you a lot of strength for all your new stuff, and hope you'll still enjoy teaching.
Also, I'm happy to learn you're also from France ! eheh
And I can't wait (but will do gladly, take all your time !! You need to enjoy writing your own game!) for the rest of the game.
And (x2) I don't personally think there's really anything to forgive, but yeah, of course, it's totally understandable !
Wish you the best !