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This was a great story to read during my morning, I love Syrol and her POV, but all three characters in the story and their POV were nice to read through as well. I loved reading about the world too and how you build off of it.

I don't really have much critism for the story honestly, except maybe there was some grammer errors at some points, but they were only small errors that I saw.

Overall, I loved reading this story, it was a nice introduction too, great job!

Thank you for reading my story! I really apperciate the feedback and criticism you've given to it, I don't really get much of that for my stories so it's great when someone does post something like this so I can improve on my work. 

Once the Jam ends I'm planning to do some edits for it so I'll take what you said in mind.

Hi, I'm interested in helping out with your project as a writer! 
My discord is: sunnivale

Hello, I'm a writer who previously did projects related to writing scripts for Graphic Novels and fan projects and I'm looking to join a group and work on gaming related projects.

I am also a coder, but currently I'm an very very much an amatuer and only have knowledge on Python and Ruby as of right now but currently I'm just focused on writing based work at the moment.

Discord: sunnivale