This was a great story to read during my morning, I love Syrol and her POV, but all three characters in the story and their POV were nice to read through as well. I loved reading about the world too and how you build off of it.
I don't really have much critism for the story honestly, except maybe there was some grammer errors at some points, but they were only small errors that I saw.
Overall, I loved reading this story, it was a nice introduction too, great job!