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I am so impressed. Visual Novels come in all shapes and qualities.  Your storytelling is top 3; your pace and scene development is top 5; renders and POV also top 5. I love that this isn’t some typical sex focused story, and that you build anticipation throughout. Your characters feel real, as do their emotions.  I like that you often Show and don’t Tell.

And regarding sex scenes, I’m actually not happy about your use of animation.  So many developers rely on animation, but I honestly thought that when the protagonist finally ended up with someone, that you would continue to use your typical slow paced scene advancement that works so well throughout.  You do that, but somehow your animation seems clunky amid the rest of the non-Animation. Also, you shouldn’t resort to the hackneyed cries of passion, like „you fill me up,“ or words to that effect.  You’ve built unique, intelligent characters, and nobody really says such stupid things, at least no one with any sense.  

Keep doing what you’re doing—this is clearly a labor of love.  Perhaps revisit the sex scenes in the future and opt for less animation and lust cries, and instead maintain the pace, focus, and voice you’ve developed from the outset.  This is a top 10 AVN with momentum upwards. Cheers!

wow, there are about a dozen AVNs that I follow because the stories, characters, and storytelling mechanics are superb, and this one is way up there.  Most AVNs are garbage that look alike, but this is one of those unique treats.  Don’t rush this work of art, but please hurry up! 😎

one of the best that appears discontinued—would be great if some talented folks had the rights and interest to keep this moving forward.  Such is life…

bummer if development has stopped, because it’s really quite a good AVN.  It has a uniqueness to it and a great pace.  Not many achieve that.  

agreed.  Worth waiting on…

yup, this is a good one.  At first I was irritated by the protagonist and his whining, but he develops well as do your other characters.  I hope you are able to devote solid time to this project because it really is a labor of love.  You have a good eye for story development and you really built up emotions well.  I will drop some cash your way.  Keep it up!

absolutely agree.  The best VN authors include less telling and more showing and reduce the amount of unnecessary monologue; additional, the best grant views from all angles with less constant face-to-face interactions.  Telling a story is as much an art form as the delivery of gorgeous scenes. Too much monologue is a crutch and a clear sign the creator(s) is/are lacking the storytelling capabilities.

Note: this VN has great aspects of the better VNs, and snipping out some of the monologue and relying on scene construction and dialogue to tell the story would greatly benefit a quite good project.

Quite enjoyable. Has brain matter associated with its creation, unlike so many others. Hope this one continues to completion. 

He's down in the dumps.   Everyone goes there from time to time. That is one aspect of this VN that makes it relatable.  He isn't necessarily a whiner, and he does get his groove back.  He is actually an enjoyable character with flaws but also strengths.  Unless all you are looking for is  some young stud constantly involved in sex scenes, I am quite sure you will find the entertainment and merit in this excellent VN.

it is totally worth it.  Top 5 best AVN from story, art, and pace.

Wow, this is really something.  I really hope this one continues to grow in story complexity, and that the developer maintains the high level of artistic/stylistic aspects of this VN.  I am going to pop this one into my top 5 VN and hope others will, too.

Keep up the great work.  This one is quality!

finished the latest update, and, well, GODDAMN!  All of my previous laudation continues to apply.  I get lost in the story, love and despise characters, and maintain a healthy bit of yearning. 

When the protagonist gets with the romantic or close friend characters, I want you to take more time—slow role the camera view over the scene, across the bodies, and build up the romance.  That’s all I could advise.  

Don’t rush a damned thing!  Keep up the great work, and we all will just be Patient.

LOL!  Indeed that was the issue.  I’d originally engaged on my MAC Air, but then attempted 6 on my desktop.  All good now.  Enjoying your writing and art thoroughly.  There are 9 quality AVNs (in my humble opinion) worthy of following, which are of professional caliber, and yours is in the top 3.  Keep up that quality production!

Yeah, I think I simply don't know how to download the new content and then pick up from where I left off.  When downloading new content, should it be saved within the folder for the old version, or simply on its own in its separate folder?

Anywho, I can think of worse fates than to re-play your novel all the way through.  I look forward to having the time to continue the adventure.  Cheers!

downloaded and yet 6 didnt load and started from scratch.  what did i do wrong?

hmmmm, going to have to free up some time to indulge:).

PLEASANTLY SURPRISED. 1 out of 10 AVNs I see are worth continuing beyond 30 mins-first hour, and yours is definitely one of that 10%. Characters without the usual trite foibles (a protagonist I don't hate!); pretty damned good animation; lovely characters; real good dialogue and monologue; and a unique story that draws you in, and isn't the same, tired, shallow pervert protagonist in a sea of dull, shallow perverts.  

I will say the joking banter back and forth is fine, even at times hilarious; however, too much and you risk it becoming tiring. A nice balance of humor will do your writing justice, as this story is not slapstick, and the friends, though crude to each other, seem to have a deep, inner connection that more serious interaction can bring out.

I also really like the sprinkling of sex scenes rather than beating the reader over the head constantly...if one wants porn alone, there is plenty of that available. You've developed your characters and scenes, thereby building expectations and desire. For example, the protagonist's ex-wife is angry, mean-spirited, and yet you have made me not hate her, and indeed I found myself wondering whether and hoping they grow closer. 

And when you opened your sex scenes they aren't some rushed job.  I think you could tease the reader even more through "camera angle" that obscures  or limits while building each additional step in the sex scene in careful yet purposeful strides.  The art is in the build up and less in the release.  I think you have that going in your work real well.

Thanks for this work so far!  I will give this one support and follow the VN's development.

Actually, I did feel similarly.  The writing is solid, with the characters actually having a bit of intellectual competence, and then they sort of degenerate into the typical run of the mill porn-inscribed mono/dialogue.  Nothing wrong with a bit of that, but at times it does feel like the characters’ voices no longer match the personas you built.  Food for thought…but don’t let it bog down the solid work you’ve been producing.

Don’t rush it, but just so you know, many of us are seriously anticipating the next update…like ppl awaiting the next great series on Netflix.  Just saying…

:-)

Nice!

the updates may be infrequent, but the quality is first rate.  Enjoyable game.  Don’t rush it for the impatient folks—keep the quality work going!

AGREE!!  Would be pretty good otherwise…but unforgivable.

AVN creators need to get their shit together—there is more to creating a story than fap material and ooh ah language.  This one needs an editor, and then the art can shine.

hey!  Damn, you have something special here.  Only a ways into it, but I am impressed enough to shout out kudos.  And a couple team—two sides of the brain too often missing in the vast majority of AVNs.  I’ll likely write again when I’ve completed the current work product, maybe with constructive criticism, or maybe just more laudation.  Cheers!

Art takes time.  With ample time comes results.  Don't give in to a feeling of being rushed.  I think you have a VN that could compete with Being a DIK and College Kings for artistic value, and I actually think your story and dialogue/monologue are better than the aforementioned because of the uniqueness.  

Great stuff!!

Yup, this should totally be on Steam.  One of the top 5 AVNs.  But I would rather see it on Steam once it is completed.  This is a good forum for it while it is being built.

So you are worried about this game not being perfect?  Folks, once again (and it is not a frequent happening amongst AVNs)  I am pleasantly surprise by, in my educated opinion, a very well developed story with truly amazing renderings.  Just enough sex to add some spice without it succumbing to pure silly eroticism.  This is ART!  You actually have a story and some characters the reader/viewer can care about.  The dialogue/monologue is smart and often funny, and every character doesn't sound the same - each seems to have their own unique voice.  I think I saw one spelling or grammar error in passing, but it was such a non-issue that I literally can't remember where I saw it.

Yup, this one will get support from me, and I will remain impatiently waiting for the next Chapters.  This is one of those gems that I almost want to wait until you say it is done before I engage with it again...but I don't have that kind of patience.  Just get us more so we can continue being massively entertained.  Cheers to you!

damn, man, with a massive budget, I can imagine an award-winning project…perhaps even modeled off this!  Top 3 best AVNs for sure!  Keep up the great work!!

Can this be downloaded without using the awful Mega app?  And must all Episodes (1-9) be downloaded and started from scratch, or can Ep 9 be downloaded and then continued where I left off in Ep 8?  Appreciate your assistance.  Cheers!

I agree.  How one must wade through some pretty unintelligible garbage in other VNs, which really are just oure jolly fests, to finally come upon this (and a few others—notably Artemis, Being a DIK, Leap of Faith, College Kings, for example) entertaining AVN. Actually fun and mentally stimulating.

I note that you actually give each character their own voice, so each doesn’t sound like all the others.  You spend time with character development, so good on you!

And re the intimacy: you allow build up, and you seem to take your time.  Other developers could learn a thing or two about storytelling from you (assuming they would even care).

I will continue to look forward to your offerings, especially this story as it continues.

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nice.  Lööking forward to digging in.👍

totally agree.  Two quality AVNs!

just finished Chapter Three.  HOLY SH|¥, what a great, entertaining artistic VN!  I mean really, this is as good as they get.  I hope it makes it to Steam when it’s complete, for the creators deserve to benefit from this.

Characters aren’t paper-thin like the majority of VNs.  Well designed, beautiful characters you actually can care about.  A story not spun from the typical b.s. yarn; and when you get to the end of Chapter Three you will curse the developers for not giving ya more!

Well deserving of accolades, and all I can say in summary is, damn it, give us more!

totally agree.  Funny, interesting, sexy, and well designed.  Great unique individual characters.  5 Stars.

And I will disagree - Your renders are fab, and they move the story along at a nice pace.  Renders can also tease, where animation is great for when (pardon the pun) a scene reaches a climax.  Renders and solid dialogue/monologue are most important, while the animations are great for solidifying or bringing a scene to a "climax."  

Thx for the hard work!

This should be high on anyone‘s list—for those who actually like a story along with the sensual/sexual content.  Lovely renderings, captivating characters.  Something to get lost in, and at times emotionally challenging.

Good job.  This definitely has room to grow and continue, while still feeling like a completed episode.  Many developers should take note!

I want to like this...I really do.  

I generally like where the story is going (or at least where it appears to be going), but reading the dialogue/monologue is like attempting to decipher a foreign language.  So damned difficult, and sometimes it makes no sense at all.  I keep thinking to myself, "damn, how I could help this developer with the language."  This does need someone to completely edit the sentences so that the great scenes and renders come together more cohesively.  As it stands, I am giving this a 6 out of 10, and can only hope the developer opts to have proficient native English speakers edit the written portion of this VN.

agreed.  A Willy Wonka  eye candy extravaganza.  I guess I thought it would be a bit more serious—my bad!