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You're very welcome :)

This was so tragic! I felt the poor thing's heartbreak. Wonderful job.

Thanks, I love to drop gradual hints throughout short pieces like this, because it's part of the fun. It makes the piece feel longer (because I love writing longer pieces). Vampires are so great to write about as well. ☺️

Hmmm....not sure what you mean.

Another interesting take! Appreciate your feedback ☺️

Thank you so much! Much luck to you!

I definitely would have taken it further with more blood, however, there were so many details I wanted to fit in before hand, which left me with no more room. So, I agree with you completely, that more blood would've been excellent, as I love to create long works...

That's an interesting take! It seems I did better than I thought I did. Thank you for your detailed feedback. ☺️

Thank you for catching that added detail, as I didn't realize I'd made that oopsie. 😅 I always welcome constructive feedback when it comes to stories, as I am a writer. It's something I'm serious about. So, I'm curious, which other parts were "reiterated"? I looked for them, but they didn't jump out at me right away. Anyway, thank you for your feedback and kind words. It is much appreciated! 

It's always great when something goes off the rails in an expected genre. I couldn't resist. :-D  Thanks!

I always like to put a twist or surprise into everything I write. It's what makes it special. Thank you! :)

Thanks for the compliments on my work. It took a lot of research and hard work getting everything right, even though it's definitely not perfect. :) 

From one vampire fan to another, great job!

That was so cute!

Mallikon is so loyal. It's too bad he just allowed himself to be held captive. Just my interpretation. Nice work!

There are several bits of "impossibility" in this one. For one, he's a very good warrior. He's determined and strong...and it makes you wonder what his reason is for continuing when he's outnumbered. You feel sorry for the Jackal. And the last line "What a futile waste of life” is so sad...because in my honest opinion, anyone fighting with this Jackal on their team would have been proud. It would have been such an honor, with how driven he was until the end. So tragic.

You brought us into the world and I could see everything. That poor Ratman and his people. So tragic. Great job!

That ending...Just wow.

You're very welcome! Good luck!

Way to create sympathy for the children of the Havoc Gods! Wow. I genuinely felt for them! It puts a whole new spin on guilty by association. 🫣

Interesting read. There are some grammatical errors toward the end, but I'm not sure if those were intentional for how the character speaks.  Overall, nice job!

WOW! I didn't see that coming! So tragic, though. I'm glad the child lived, but what a traumatizing event! This was a refreshing first-person read!

It's too bad Alexander couldn't experience joy before suffering. Well written for such a short piece!

This was well put together and complex, yet understandable. I really enjoyed the character of Sassio, and how determined and ambitious he was. Great piece overall!

I felt so sad for Tza-Quol. It must have been so terrifying and embarrassing to let his people down....and without an explanation is even worse! On the other hand, I chuckled a little, because somehow there's humor to it that I can't put my finger on. Thanks for the entertaining read! ☺️

This could totally be a short film! Thanks for the dark humor 😂

So descriptive, so original, so depressing...yet so refreshing. BRAVO!

I loved the Ratman! And your cover picture is cute with the ratman faces 😂

This flowed really well, and it's an interesting way of describing an "impossible" mission. Nicely done!

Well done! I love the way you described the zombie and how he feels. :)